Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Without a shadow of a doubt, in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, human beings are preoccupied and overwhelmed with their personal life and do not have a lot of time to spend with their family. Parents are no exception to this very supposition. they are always trying to make their time free and spend it with their children who are one of their most precious assets. However, an unanswered question which is often raised during this issue is that whether it is better that parents spend this limited time to have fun playing sports or games with their children, or on doing schoolwork related things. despite the arguments asserting that schoolwork might be a better choice, I believe otherwise, maintaining that playing fun things with their children carries more advantages. in the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my point of view.
the first compelling reason corroborating my idea is that having fun playing games with the children keeps their spirits up and helps them to freshen their minds. To be more specific, creating joyful memories, keeps children fresh through the year, which affects their productivity and performance indirectly in a positive manner. Life is not all about school and studies, but it is about the joy and the happy moments people create and spend together. The children spend enough time on studying during school-day and are already overwhelmed and overburdened by school activities. Thus, they prefer to spend the limited time that they have with their parents on doing something joyful like online games. For instance, My cousin Jack, was working as a strategy manager in a motor vehicle production company and had a hectic lifestyle and therefore, a limited time to spend with his child, Bella. Seeing Bella depressed, he decided to spend this limited time on creating joyful memories and having fun with her. Not only this made Bella way happier and energetic, but it affected Bela’s performance at school and her grades increased as well.
Furthermore, playing games with children help parents to improve their family relationship. parents who are busy with their life, should provide their children with the opportunity to become closer to them and get to know each other in a better light. If family members be apart from one another and do not spend enough time together, a weird sense of becoming strangers will be rooted in the heart of them and they will not be each other’s safe haven anymore. My own experience is a compelling example of it. Living in a family in which both of my parents were employed and had to work all day, I felt alone and depressed. I was only 10 years old and felt my parents have become strangers to me and none of them love me. neither of us knew each other or even feel close to one another. Having consulted with a therapist, my parents decided to spend an hour a day with me on doing joyful and fun things like playing games or cooking together. After a while, I felt much better and closer to my parents. Had not we spent time together, we could not break the wall between us and know each other’s interests and demands.
All in all, given the reasons I have mentioned above, it seems fair to conclude that parents should spend their limited time on having fun with their children. I think this way because first, it keeps the children spirits up and improves their performance as a result, and it improves their family relationships and ties as well. Needless to say, my opinion brings up a lot of challenges and questions, which go beyond the scope of this essay.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: They
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...their children carries more advantages. in the following paragraphs, I will elabor...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a positive manner" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...productivity and performance indirectly in a positive manner. Life is not all about school and studi...
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Suggestion: Parents
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Line 5, column 442, Rule ID: SAFE_HAVEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'haven'.
Suggestion: haven
... them and they will not be each other’s safe haven anymore. My own experience is a compell...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, apart from, for instance, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 37.0 13.8261648746 268% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 86.0 52.1666666667 165% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2974.0 1977.66487455 150% => OK
No of words: 617.0 407.700716846 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82009724473 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98392262146 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56256425808 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463533225284 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 893.7 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6180749402 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.148148148 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8518518519 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.37037037037 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370910050936 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104165979083 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877966041957 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250121200283 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623842489713 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 268, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
... no exception to this very supposition. they are always trying to make their time fr...
^^^^
Line 1, column 625, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Despite
... or on doing schoolwork related things. despite the arguments asserting that schoolwork...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 801, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...their children carries more advantages. in the following paragraphs, I will elabor...
^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... will elaborate on my point of view. the first compelling reason corroborating m...
^^^
Line 3, column 310, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive manner" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...productivity and performance indirectly in a positive manner. Life is not all about school and studi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Parents
...s to improve their family relationship. parents who are busy with their life, should pr...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 442, Rule ID: SAFE_HAVEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'haven'.
Suggestion: haven
... them and they will not be each other’s safe haven anymore. My own experience is a compell...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, apart from, for instance, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 37.0 13.8261648746 268% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 86.0 52.1666666667 165% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2974.0 1977.66487455 150% => OK
No of words: 617.0 407.700716846 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82009724473 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98392262146 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56256425808 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463533225284 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 893.7 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6180749402 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.148148148 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8518518519 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.37037037037 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370910050936 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104165979083 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877966041957 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250121200283 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623842489713 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.