Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, there are controversial debates bout the method that parents use to raise their children. This situation has become harder when parents are really busy. In this case, some people believe the best use of parents' free time is to have fun playing games or sports with their children; however, others think that working together, parents and children, on school assignments is much more crucial. Personally, I am inclined toward the former group's opinion and I will elaborate on my perspective in what follows.
First and foremost, spending parents' leisure time playing games and having fun can improve children's health. This is because in this situation, even for a few hours, young students can forget the tension of school days and relieve stress which is very vital to children's mental health. Also, by doing some activities during games, their physical health will improve too. For instance, consider a boy who lives with his parents and they just have two hours a day to meet each other because of his parent's careers. This boy certainly experiences high stress and anxiety, first, because of school's assignments and exams, and second, due to their parent's absence. In such conditions, his parents decide to allocate their spare time to play with their son. Consequently, this plan works and helps the boy not only relieve stress but also improve his academic skills. On the other hand, it would not be possible if his parent's decision was something else.
Another important factor that is worth mentioning here is that the first method can enrich children's experience. This is because when they decide to play games or sports certainly, they try various games. For example, they may choose to play some active games such as football, volleyball, and handball. Also, sometimes due to different conditions such as snowstorms they may prefer to just stay indoors and play some other games such as chess. All of these different games cause the children to be in a challenging situation and to try their best to find some solutions for probable problems. At last, this will be a great aid for children to enrich their experience. As a personal example, although I am a busy mother, I try my best to spend my free time playing with my daughter and as a result, I understand that even these few hours have great effects on my daughter and enrich her experience.
All in all, based on the aforementioned reasons I stated above, I strongly believe the first method, spending parents' time on playing games and sports with their children is the best way. This is because not only does this method can improve children's health but also it can enrich children's experience as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, well, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2231.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92494481236 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51988471265 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483443708609 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6411008688 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.238095238 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7619047619 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360109584059 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108371210096 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111795232396 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24409932269 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704235929473 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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