Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to sc

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork.

Nowadays, regarding fast pace of life, todays parents do not have leisure time as much as past. The controversial issue which has been raised recently regarded knowing about being present in which activity of children is most important. Some people strongly hold the view that participation in kids playing game or even sports has more benefits. On the other hand, the majority of people contradict this idea and contributing in kid's school work is their opinion. By and large, I personally concur with the latter concept and contend that it is more better. In the following paragraphs, I will try to aptly pinpoint the most outstanding reasons of my point of view.
First of all, from my own perspective, one of the most striking reason is that doing school work and other stuffs which are related to school and homework, not only lead to spent time together, but also is responsible to get a good grade in courses which result in having good job and bright future. To clarify, take the example of myself, when I was an elementary student my dad helped me in doing homework every night after he got back home of job, Furthermore, i got rank A that year.
In my opinion, another remarkable reason to take into account is that parents will get accustom to school atmosphere and be familiar with their child's friends, teachers behavior and lots of related thing that may have cause problems and prevent of them which might happen to child because as we know school's time take the most of the students daily life and it should be as well as possible with no stress and probable tensions.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, one can logically draw a conclusion that parent's participation in children's school activity has more advantageous rather than playing games. But that was a story in a nutshell; actually there are some other reasons and examples, cogently buttressing the argument, which are not mentioned above due to the dearth of time.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 546, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
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Line 2, column 464, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...r he got back home of job, Furthermore, i got rank A that year. In my opinion, a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, regarding, so, well, as well as, by and large, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82058823529 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62510339226 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602941176471 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.7575711084 48.9658058833 202% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 149.0 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.9090909091 20.6045352989 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 5.45110844103 238% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222022163577 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0773526270308 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05577403368 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128212369653 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.02633249094 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.27 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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