Some people prefer to buy technological devices as soon as they are available to the public, while other people prefer to wait. Which do you prefer and why? Please include specific details in your answer.
In todays sophisticated and complex world pupils are overwhelmed with different challenges in their daily life. Technology advancements come to help people in order to solve some of these complexities. While some people prefer to adopt technologies as soon as it launch in to public, I am of the believe that it is better to wait, and I will analyze my reasons throughout this essay.
To begin with, some companies may not make appropriate tests on their product, so some technology devices may have some adverse effect or maybe difunctional after they launch to public. If we don't recognize its bugs we might buy that product and waste our money. For instance, there was an cell phone company in my country, Iran, which produce cell phone for low income customer and their mission was "to equipped poor people with smart phone". When they launch their first product in to market at first face with prosperity in selling, but after a while some dysfunctionality of cell phones reveal. Unfortunately since the company was so young, it doesn't guarantee their product, so many people whos bought those cell phones not only lose their money but also they had no cell phone.
What is more, new technology devices always needs some new skills to make use of that device, so it is better to wait and learn those skills from experts and then use it. Without learning its especial skill we can use it, so we will be disappointed with that gadget, we also might have a bad judge about that device. For example, when iPad launched to market for first time, there was no instruction about how to use it, however, many people bought it, since some were not familiar with its usage and how is worked, so many people thought that it doesn't work well and thrown it away. After a while the company published its tutorial they recognized that they made a mistake.
To conclude, while there are several arguments on each side, I profoundly believe that we should wait to not only to ensure about its possible bugs and and adverse effects, but also to learn its requisite skill to exploiter that technology device appropriately.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, well, while, for example, for instance, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1762.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81420765027 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55674061484 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532786885246 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.0174427964 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.538461538 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1538461538 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.69230769231 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184243184236 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751290345858 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0697264235154 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12468400254 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0696893579602 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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