some people prefer to focus on ambitious dreams while other thinks realistic goals are more important. which do you prefer and why?
In today's progressive world where we live, having a goal plays a crucial role in the individual's life, due to its paramount importance, everyone have been putting all of their efforts in order to achieve their goals or even their dreams. Some people hold the conviction that focusing on the dreams is better than thinking about realistic goals. I firmly contend that thinks about realistic goals is much more beneficial for people. I elaborated on my viewpoints in the following paragraphs.
The first reason which comes to mind at the first glance is that having realistic goals provided individuals with the opportunity to became familiar with their talents and skills as well as take advantage of their talents. The more realistic the goals are, the more possibility their talents would be recognized. In this regard, when people set the realistic goals for themselves and do their best to achieve them, they know what kind of kind of talents are they better thanks to trial and error they do to achieve their goals. In contrast, ambitious dreams are not realistic which cause people to become disappointed about themselves and they think that they are not talented at all. let me provide a personal example to illustrate that, when I was at the high school, I wanted to become a makeup artist, in order to pursue to my goal, I attended the numerous learning courses to become a professional makeup artist. Having participated those courses, I would identify that how I was talented in the drawing which was not known to me before. If I have not had a goal to become makeup artist, I would have never recognized my talents.
The second equally important reason which should be mentioned here is that having realistic goal make person more persistent to achieve their goals compared to the dreams only improve in imagination ability. When people dream, they know that achieving them is impossible in the real life, so what they do is that only make plan in their mind and this plan never come true in the real life. On the contrast, real goal gives motivation to people due to fact they know that if they try hard and not give up easily when encountering problematic situation, they will achieve their goals. A recently conducted study at my country shows that students with the realistic goal is much more hardworking and patient in their goals compared to those only dream about their goals.
To sum up, having considered all aforementioned reasons, we can conclude that having realist goal is much more beneficial for human being not only provides opportunity to recognize their passion and talents, but also they become more persistent in achieving their goals.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, well, in contrast, kind of, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2222.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90507726269 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58574762226 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459161147903 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 680.4 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.1376225004 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.875 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3125 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1875 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204457181332 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913091765493 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674157523032 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142050913227 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395775175045 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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