Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age and should spend most of their time on school studies. Others believe that young children should spend most of their time playing. Compare these two views. Which view do you agree with? Why?
since a long time ago, human beings have been involved in a struggle to devise some new methods for spending their time. this tendency can be observed from the first days of childhood when they like to play and enjoy from moments. however, it has been a heated controversy between people to consider an appropriate way for children to spend their time. In this regard, some may hold the opinion that it is reasonable they spend their time for educating in a formal way. On the other hand, others believe that playing is the best education method for them in this age. I, personally, subscribe to the later one for a number of reasons two of which are of prominent importance, which are elaborated upon hereunder.
First and foremost, play helps children to be responsible and independent persons in their life. I am inclined to declare that they were taught to be dependent ones from the beginning of their life. Their parents and teachers decide for them what and how do some stuff. Hence, it can lead them to be a robot in life and wait to receive the next mission. however, play is a good method for them to learn how make decisions and they also would try to be a responsible one since they try to consider some consequences of their choice. For example, they can select what game they like to play and how should they do that. Moreover, when they made a mistake, they noticed that it would be better for them to be patient in their decisions and try to consider all aspects of an issue.
Having discussed the issue from the previous perspective I would rather look at it from another point of view. it gives them a good opportunity to respond to some of their needs. Nobody could overlook this fact that they are so curious to know about the origin and the sources of things. it would be resentful for some parents on the condition that children played with home devices to catch their concepts. For example, they like to destroy some devices in order to catch their origin. Therefore, they should be allowed to make a building with some blocks and after that, they could smash it and it would be enjoyable for them. Thus, I think playing provides a good atmosphere for them to experience what they need to know without any worries.
To sum up, taking all above-mentioned arguments into consideration, it can be concluded that playing is the better way for children to spend their time. Not only does it help them to be responsible and independent persons, but also it prepares appropriate space for them to meet what they curious to know about them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for example, i think, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2110.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6170678337 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48180948238 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466083150985 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.8944769492 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9090909091 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7727272727 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90909090909 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208523043126 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809442756252 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648060121657 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14617112147 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640803787637 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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