There are people who thinks that governments should spend more money on developing or buying computer technologies whereas some other people think that money should be spend on basic needs. I am defending the opinion of that governments should spend more money on developing/buying computer technology because of the reasons I will explain in this essay.
First of all, we are living in the technology era so, it is very significant to be able to keep up with the improvements in technology. Since the computer technologies are in merchandise, military, education and daily life, it is vital to catch the innovations. Otherwise, we will be doomed to be dependent on other countries even for basic needs such as mobile phones, foods, clothes and etc.
Next, if our government should not pay attention to the computer technologies enough, in other words should not spend required amount of money to it, the basic needs would not be absorbed. Why? Because, in this era every single thing -from transportation to communication- that one can imagine is strongly depends on the computer technologies. Therefore, if we think through, it is easy to realize that if we want to basic needs to be done, then we have to have advanced computer technologies.
Lastly, countries that holds computer technologies have a bright future because they recieve brain drain from many non-developed or developing countries. It is so simple to have qualified employees for these countries since they can provide many opportunities and high life standards for them. Hence, the countries that are pioneer of computer technologies never stop growing and others keep on make no headway. So, the gap between these countries increases.
As a conclusion, to be a developed, strong and independent country, governments should spend as much money as possible to buy or develop computer technologies.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, lastly, so, then, therefore, whereas, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1578.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22516556291 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0772191445 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53642384106 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.669530302 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.384615385 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2307692308 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414586899991 0.236089414692 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147447335058 0.076458572812 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.168082697737 0.0737576698707 228% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252348609851 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.185701997889 0.0645574589148 288% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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