Some people think that only the politicians can make significant changes in society, while others think that individuals can have a lot of influence. What is your opinion?
Time flies, dragging the drastic alterations in human awareness as to how the government can positively impact society; however, some people state that individuals can influence the public as much as the government can. I strongly believe that both the government and citizens could make society better by their ways.
Firstly, the government is the most powerful organization in a country; this means that amending the policy to apply for citizens is the fastest method that the government can do to change society positively. With the strategy, the government lobby a part of the citizen but the whole so that it cannot be used in the long term. For example, in VietNam, during the northern domination, only mandarins who are greedy for money, afraid of the northern colonists, will listen to the enemy's commission. Instead, the rest of the people always try to find a way to revolt to regain their independence. This example reflects the fact that only a fraction of the citizens obeys directives from the government.
On the other hand, the bandwagon effect can be a great idea to create a campaign to get people to agree on something. With some epitome people, they can educate and encourage other citizens to have the same characteristics to become a society without criminality and peace. This bandwagon effect can easily make a notable change; moreover, it helps future orientation for posterity. For instance, many of the past uprisings in Vietnam were rooted in people who shared the same vision and hatred for the colonists and succeeded in gaining their independence afterward. This means that starting with individuals can make a huge difference in society, proving that this strategy is useful.
All things considered, each method will have its benefits and drawbacks. Choosing a suitable method to apply will be hard for the government if they want to change society positively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, as to, for example, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09967845659 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79698410942 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556270096463 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4140600756 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.285714286 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2142857143 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07142857143 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231011368645 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760652924907 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601007210292 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139588822797 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700198236292 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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