Should governments make decisions about people's lifestyle, or should people make their own decisions?
One of the major tasks of the government is that the government has to keep the country organized and peaceful. Some people believe that the government should intervene in people's way of life by making decisions on behalf of their residents. I half agree with this statement because this method has both advantages and drawbacks which I will list below.
To begin with, the government can control the country better with strategy. As the most powerful organization in the country, the government always wants good things for its citizens. This means that the government will suggest what the citizens should do so as to benefit their life. Not all people are literate enough to be well-behaved or polite with others; therefore, through laws, the government is likely to adjust citizens’ behaviors or manners for a good purpose. Furthermore, with this process, the government can prevent people who have a tendency to do bad behavior such as robbing or killing people. So that, forming a citizen's lifestyle in a long term can effectively form a society without criminals.
On the other hand, despite the aforementioned benefits, there is a downside when the government controls people’s lifestyles. It is unjust for citizens who have a good attribute to follow the government rule due to some bad pattern in society. If people cannot live the life they want, they might not develop all of their potentials. For example, normally people can develop their potential by experiencing many different challenging cases; however, due to government rules of lifestyle, they might not find and reach their potential. This means that people cannot become their best version although they might. Even more serious is that the government can receive some opposition from people who are not satisfied with the rules. This could deteriorate the governmental organizations making them unmanageable.
In conclusion, forming a good lifestyle for citizens is a good move. Nevertheless, sometimes the government should place itself in the citizens’ perspective.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 256, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ill suggest what the citizens should do so as to benefit their life. Not all people are ...
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Line 2, column 632, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'citizens'' or 'citizen's'?
Suggestion: citizens'; citizen's
...g or killing people. So that, forming a citizens lifestyle in a long term can effectivel...
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Line 3, column 408, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...develop their potential by experiencing many different challenging cases; however, due to gove...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29141104294 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91952515993 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555214723926 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9159926568 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8333333333 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1111111111 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88888888889 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313999518819 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100778688758 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107757477277 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197204858741 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0809863891332 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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