Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Adolescents are prone to commit a crime if they do not receive a good education from adults. Although a juvenile is deemed not to listen easily, I concur that it is best for reformed offenders to reshapetalk to teenagers’ awareness about the dangers of committing an offence because of vivid experience and reliability.
To begin with, a higher level of reliability to listeners seems to be created by a well-trained offender. The reason is that criminals truly know and experience the adverse consequences of illegal acts; as a result, they can emotionally report in detail all the process and consequences of a crime as well as ways to avoid, which more or less can convince teenagers. For example, I usually cast doubt on my parents' warnings against drinking alcohol before legal age; nevertheless, I somehow painstakingly followed my brother’s reminder of not drinking beers after I saw that he was fined by the police since he drank beers at his friend’s party.
Secondly, people who did not sail through the problems can solely give cautions by and large which not only baffle teenagers but also evoke their curiosity. Those general warnings usually flummox juveniles because they are not tangible enough, and they do not give a big picture of what will happen if teenagers commit a crime. Once juveniles are confused, they might attempt to figure out the answer by themselves which can endanger them. For instance, there was a boy, who was well-educated, related to nicotine smuggling. His parents did teach him well and also warned him not to get involved in any illegal activities. Nevertheless, they just gave him an overall alarm, so he himself decided to figure out what it would be if he crossed the line. The little boy had been sentenced for two years because of his actions.
Finally, explanations which derive from noncriminals deem to be really harsh, or even hurt teenagers' emotions. It seems that they cannot find suitable ways to prevent teenage rebellion except for giving as much deterrent as they can. On the contrary, reformed criminals might subtly talk to the teenagers and give them a load of beneficial advice which comes from the bottom of their heart.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people who have been sent to prison are the most suitable ones to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime because they can give juveniles the whole stories in detail and give useful advice which is needed for teenagers.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l advice which is needed for teenagers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, so, well, except for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, by and large, more or less, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95903614458 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76084646244 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559036144578 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.4867402769 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.625 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9375 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1875 5.45110844103 242% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 3.85842293907 389% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167000600107 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542179241879 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635046312264 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113019862517 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0814903495004 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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