For the students (ages 5-10), It is better to take a break for every one hour of instruction or let them to focus on lessons for a long period of time?
Throughout the history, schools have played a key role in children’s life. The controversial question which arises here is that it is better to allow children a break every one hour of class or make them focus for longer period of time. I believe that a short break after one hour teaching is indispensable for children. In what follows, I will elaborate on my perspective.
The most remarkable point to be mentioned is that playing affect the juvenier's life profoundly because during play children learn about way of life and how to communicate with their peers, so a break every one hour provides them with a briliant future. My sister expereince is a compelling example for this. She has a thirteen-year-old daughter who has a lot of problems for speaking. When she was a elementry school student, her mother had argument with her and had forced her to study every moment of break time. Had my sister not have done this cruelsome thing, her daughter has not such a terrible obstacles.
Another equally important reason is that the longer period of time the teachers teach, the less concentration the pupils have. According to the fact that the brain has a certain level of ability to focus on something, the students attention decrease within long hours and they become mentally exhausted and they are not able to percieve the concepts the teacher is speaking about. A survey conducted in our country reveals that the brain ability of focusing have a direct relationship with the age and it increas by human aging and it is weaker for children than adults.
In conclusion, it is detrimantal for children to make them stay in classroom and listen to the teacher teaching. It is suggested that every school take it into consideration that not only playing have as much advantages as learning various lessons for children, but also their attention weakens after long hour.
- agree 3
- tpo 36 3
- High school teachers (teachers of age 14-18) spend most of the class time lecturing while the students listen and take note. Other high school teachers spend mmost of the class time on discussion and projects that students are highly involed in and exchan 76
- tpo 37 3
- It is more enjoyable to have a job when you work only three days a week for long hours than have a job when you work five days a week for shorter hours? 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 227, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... of class or make them focus for longer period of time. I believe that a short break after one...
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Line 5, column 399, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... of problems for speaking. When she was a elementry school student, her mother ha...
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Line 5, column 603, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'obstacle'?
Suggestion: obstacle
...g, her daughter has not such a terrible obstacles. Another equally important reason...
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Line 9, column 53, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...lly important reason is that the longer period of time the teachers teach, the less concentrat...
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Line 9, column 223, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...l of ability to focus on something, the students attention decrease within long hours an...
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Line 13, column 205, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ideration that not only playing have as much advantages as learning various lessons ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, in conclusion, speaking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95297805643 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78949663155 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576802507837 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.4516880561 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.857142857 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7857142857 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42857142857 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368604092066 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118321154905 0.076458572812 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100395680695 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224700476872 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602804768822 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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