Students in a university club want to help others, but they can only choose one project a year which one of the following is the best 1- help those students in a nearby primary school with reading and mathematics 2- help people who cannot afford to build or rent a home to build a house 3-visit and assist elderly people with daily tasks.
Human beings have always been eager to help others. It gives them good feelings and makes the life easier for mankind. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this point is that what is the best way that has the most benefits for both the students and people. Some people believe that students should try to be helpful for the education of younger kids or people who need a place for living. Some others, including me, have a different viewpoint. I firmly believe that however, the mentioned projects have worth to help, elder people should consider for helping. Not only is it one of the basic concepts of human rights, but also they are not strong enough to prepare their basic needs.
First and foremost, students will be able to be familiar with essential human rights during their lifetime. Needless to say, when people are in the final years of their lives they have essential needs that everyone should pay special attention to them. It causes that people be aware of the real needs of each other and in fact, it is more respectful of human beings. For instance, when I was a high school student, I visited a place which has been provided by the government for elder people. I confronted there with a woman who was being tried to wear her clothes. I really felt that she had difficulty with this task. When I helped her to handle her challenge, she said me" dear son, I never forget your assistance". At that moment I had a nice feeling since I could be effective for a human who really was suffering from such a condition. As you can see, I could respond to the basic need an elder person as a student.
A furthermore significant point is that the elder people have the less energy to cover their activities. It is the main duty for everyone to assist them to feel free from their difficult circumstances. Let's consider my friend's experience to clarify the paramount importance of this task. There was a time that my friend was a member of a cultural group. They often visited the old people in their house. Reading is a real need for them, however, due to the weak vision, they cannot do it effectively. Therefore, it may lead them to feel depressed. My friend read different newspapers for them and they eagerly notice what my friend says. It has a profound effect on their emotions since they can be aware of surrounding environments and various events throughout the country. That is why helping old people is the best way for students.
In brief, by taking into account all the aforementioned reasons, being helpful to aged people is a rational strategy that students should be involved in. Therefore, it is highly recommended for educational systems to pay attention to this standpoint.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, really, regarding, so, therefore, for instance, in brief, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2261.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73012552301 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61161697666 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514644351464 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7196463169 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.75 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0714285714 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.07142857143 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213499120877 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563162822669 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471402180178 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13617147484 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487811895214 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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