Nowadys, it is commonly accepted that to obtain success, the ablity of take risks is neccessary. Contrary to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that when we choose to take riske we threatend our social position and if this riske have not good result, this condiction provide depresion for us. Thus it is better to doing works that we are sure that we have enough ability on its. I, to a great extent agree with this idea that take riske is essential ability to recive success in the life.
First and foremost, if we have a whole view to history of human life in the world, we can see that all of famus and wonderful people who did very significant works and sevises for another people. We see that all of them take risks and remaind persist on their point of view. For example, the Gallivor who known as a inteligent stranomer in the world. He took a really big risk to could substantiated his ideas. He said that the Earth is global but most of people and specially phlasephes diagree with his idea and they want to kill him. But Galliver stay on his idea and rimained of people mind for ever.
On another significant fact that should be taken into the consideration is that each kind of new things that we want to do for the first time is aline with some level of risks. This is true that behinde of each desision should be present a lot of study and percise research. But, enyway, examine each kind of this new things are risky. For example, when scientist want to test a new drug for cancer, even this drug spend a lot of examination process but test of this drug of humans are common with some unknown aspect and also risks. But, if they do not accept this risk may be we could not treatment a lot of kinds of deasis.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that take risks are certical for recive to success. Because of a lot of historical evidence and a quick glance to process of development around ours.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 312, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...is condiction provide depresion for us. Thus it is better to doing works that we are...
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Line 2, column 302, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a known'.
Suggestion: who is a known
...oint of view. For example, the Gallivor who known as a inteligent stranomer in the world....
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Line 2, column 315, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... For example, the Gallivor who known as a inteligent stranomer in the world. He t...
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Line 2, column 387, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'substantiate'
Suggestion: substantiate
...rld. He took a really big risk to could substantiated his ideas. He said that the Earth is gl...
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Line 2, column 449, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...s. He said that the Earth is global but most of people and specially phlasephes diagree with h...
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Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'alined'.
Suggestion: alined
...hat we want to do for the first time is aline with some level of risks. This is true ...
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Line 3, column 572, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...s. But, if they do not accept this risk may be we could not treatment a lot of kinds o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, so, still, thus, for example, kind of, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1595.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.39393939394 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28950978695 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515151515152 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.771694667 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8235294118 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3529411765 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171098216313 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061472050455 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439676316834 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101732734501 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256729464877 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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