It’s undeniable that studying hard in the school is a better choice for everyone to get success in the future job. It seems to some people that they could get more help from the relationship building. Because they thinks it will change others’ attitude about them which means more chance to get promotion. While I will take this point in a pinch of salt. In my view, the ability to relate well is just a minor skill we should take while the real knowledge is the major thing we can get from the school
First of all, the professional knowledge is the only advantage of students contrast to the other jobseekers who have experiences of job. If we could get victory from the competition of getting a hot job, we will have more chance to join in our dreaming company. The Peking University’s statistics figures suggested that the students whose score is in top 50% could get 28% more paid in their first job and the chance to get in a well-known company is 11% higher than the ones whose score is not well.
On the other hand, studying hard in the school could give us a chance to a high platform. We could have chance to get into a better school or make tech advance if we are good enough in our professional learning. We all know one of the motivations that the youth want to get in best school is be well-paid. At mean time, a huge amount of the best valuable companies of the world such as Facebook, Microsoft, Tencent were all come from the idea of students who are in the best college of the world. This phenomenon is not because they wanted to be someone’s friends in this school, but because they had learnt a lot and got the ability to describe the future of our civilization.
After what we have discussed above, we can easily come to the conclusion that though we can get some advantages from our social skills, studying hard and get more knowledge in our school is more important.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement All university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is 70
- Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The most important goal of education is to teach people how to educate themselves 63
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement All university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is 70
- For success in a future job the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 202, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...re help from the relationship building. Because they thinks it will change others’ atti...
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Line 1, column 215, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'think'
Suggestion: think
...the relationship building. Because they thinks it will change others’ attitude about t...
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Line 1, column 307, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ich means more chance to get promotion. While I will take this point in a pinch of sa...
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Line 3, column 274, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'in the best'.
Suggestion: in the best
... motivations that the youth want to get in best school is be well-paid. At mean time, a...
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Line 3, column 292, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...the youth want to get in best school is be well-paid. At mean time, a huge amount ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, well, while, such as, first of all, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1555.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4683908046 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49249600449 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.5453531335 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.615384615 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7692307692 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250547515385 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968255066129 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0913102038356 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158050795072 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649439131687 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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