Many people believe that television is a blessing because it provides amusements to it's fans. However, others think that television is a curse, wasting people's time. In my opinion, watching television has many drawbacks and it is better to limit it's usage. Television is a main cause of obesity, distraction, and lack of exercise
First, television does not promote healthy life style. Many people spend so much time watching television which causes them to eat more, drink more, and become lazy. Eventually, This sedentary life style would result and an increase in body weight. Obesity is a major cause of many diseases which include diabetes, hypertension, and heart diseases. The longer hours we spend watching television, the more we are prone to such diseases. Moreover, watching television makes the children sleep late. a common saying" sleep early and wake up early, astonishingly, you health will improve". Moreover, watching television for a long time has a bad effect on vision. Many people experience deterioration in vision after a standing long hours behind the television.
Secondly. although watching television may provide some amusement, it is also a reason to postpone many of daily activities, thus make us procrastinate. Procrastination is the tendency to delay doing things that are a necessity. For instance, in many occasions, I had to delay going to jog in order not to miss a program that I watch on the television. Exercising is very crucial for a person a health. Without exercise the brain, the body, and organs cannot function properly. Therefore, spending so much time watching television is a waist of time.
Thirdly, watching television does not encourage students to learn. After school, Students have home works and many parents find difficulties in preventing their children from watching television. For example, my son had a math exam last Friday, and he lost focus as he wanted to watch a football game that was being broadcast-ed between Manchester united and Liverpool. Thus he was not able concentration on his exam.
Finally, although watching television provides some amusements, it may hinder a person for practicing his or her hobbies. For example, many people like to play music or sports, or even read a book. Unfortunately, without knowing, a person feels drifted away from doing his favorite hobby. For example, my daughter plays the piano, and every time she sits to watch television, she refrain from practicing. Therefore, I strongly, discourage her from wasting her time.
In Conclusion, Watching television may make people happy. However, it is a double-edge sword since it promotes unhealthy life style, and hinder people from practicing their favorite hobby
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 498, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: A
...levision makes the children sleep late. a common saying' sleep early and wak...
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Line 5, column 11, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Although
...rs behind the television. Secondly. although watching television may provide some am...
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Line 8, column 371, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...etween Manchester united and Liverpool. Thus he was not able concentration on his ex...
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Line 10, column 381, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'refrains'.
Suggestion: refrains
... time she sits to watch television, she refrain from practicing. Therefore, I strongly,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2309.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3202764977 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96424877426 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548387096774 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.9407659375 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.6206896552 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9655172414 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.51724137931 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112618289841 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.037188768983 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489960116815 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.066374208178 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419932860864 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.98 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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