There are many parents that make use of smartphones in order to stay to stay communicated with their children. What do you thing about that? (explain)
One of the most used devices around the globe is the smart phone. This particulary techonological stuff that can take pictures, record video and audios, make easier the communication throught using internet. Even though, some parents allow to their children to use this kind of device with internet access with the purpose of establish communication with them. From my point of view, this device is not designed to be using by a child, because him not could be able to using only to receive callings or send messages, as well we know the curiosity of a kid is huge, so probably he will use the internet for other functions .
First, there are many websistes and mobile application with explicit content online, it could change the behave of a child, converting him into a more madurer person. For example, when I was living in cozy community in Guatemala, I had the opportunity of meet a child of 8 years old,Lucas,he was alone at home most of the time due to his parents worked hard to earn a living. Nonetheless, in order to stay in contact with him, his parents gave him a brand-new smartphone which was connected to the wifi's house. When I was invited to a local community celebration, their parents gave to me the responsability to take care of the child, then I accepted. Later, I realized he was watching violence movies on youtube, suddenly I grabbed his cellphone and I called to his parents. Their parents thanks to me and told me that Lucas personality changed since they give him that cellphone, as a consequence he started to do things as an adult person do such as instead of watching cartoon movies he start watching news.
Second, a child need to be feel free and enjoyabled, I mean do the same things as a child. The internet could distracting him of make new friends, practice a sport or developed his creativity. For instance, Mario, one of my best friends, considers that life his childhood is described in only one word "fun", he learned how to play soccer, fly a knite and make a wood skateboard. Nowadays, that he is older he judge that some children are losing a good adventures using their cellphones, and remarks that he wants to came back to that glorious age.
In conclusion, the parents should restrict the use of this device with internet connection, because the children are tempting to be affected by unwished data, and isolated them to live happy. Personally, I, recommend to parents do not try to stay communicated with the kids by this way, soon or later the child will not the risks of the internet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 623, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ill use the internet for other functions . First, there are many websistes and...
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Line 3, column 102, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...xplicit content online, it could change the behave of a child, converting him into a more ...
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Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Lucas
...portunity of meet a child of 8 years old,Lucas,he was alone at home most of the time d...
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Line 3, column 992, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'starts'.
Suggestion: starts
...s instead of watching cartoon movies he start watching news. Second, a child need...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 111, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'distract'
Suggestion: distract
...e things as a child. The internet could distracting him of make new friends, practice a spo...
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Line 5, column 421, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'judges'.
Suggestion: judges
...ateboard. Nowadays, that he is older he judge that some children are losing a good ad...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, nonetheless, second, so, then, well, for example, for instance, i mean, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2107.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71364653244 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78070086731 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548098434004 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.7068397137 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.6875 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9375 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260441543629 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0826420294873 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063916956612 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155151112618 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433809106578 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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