Are you agree or disagree?
Children have to vote in the next election's term?
The elections are a popular event around the world, they promote the right of vote. It's means everyone can vote. However, those votes counts to every person that coming to age or is older. There is hot debate over allow young people, those ones over 15, to be voters. In my opinion, this is a bad idea to consider, because at that age they are independent individuals.
Children are mainly influenced by parents, so if a parent vote for a particular party. Probably the kids will do the same, I mean they tend to follow the step of an adult. For example, in my country Gt, where the general elections where held on 2014, there was a big influence of creating a voting system, especially for the adolescents, because they do not have the age requirement. Futhermore, it had the objective to understand how the chidren vote. The result of these elections were close to the real voting system. The two predominant parties, FCN and UNE, were in the same positions. Therefore, it is commonly think about that adult's decision affects on the child thinking.
Social media has been considered as one of the riskiest enemies of the reliability of an election system. According to many researches, many parties manipulate and undermine their competitors using websites such as Facebook or Twitter. Additionally,most of those technology tools are mainly used by young people. In other words, the children could vote by bad judgemented. For instance, Mario, who is 15, use social media to stay in contact with his family, due to he is studying abroad. Nevertheless, he told me via message, he wanted to vote in his country, Argentina, because he considers that votes need to be counted. In my perspective, When I asked him about the parties preferences, he responds the Lucio's Party, because he saw a lot of advertisment on Facebook about it. Later, I searched on Google, suddenly I found the party does not exists, so my friend was baffled with fake information.
In conclusion, the voting system must not permit that children vote, because they are prospense to follow external suggestions and read unreliable information in relation with politics.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: those
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Suggestion: thought
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Suggestion: , most
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Message: Did you mean 'exist'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: exist
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i mean, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93370165746 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84129954777 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604972375691 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.3501760913 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0476190476 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2380952381 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.19047619048 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156575392435 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048841255726 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513329646499 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103121180581 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279032493311 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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