Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Dancing plays an important role in a culture. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Dancing can be the description of feel happy for some people, perhaps is for that most of parties or celebrations events do not require blasting music by guests would enjoying, because they could not dance. Nevertheless, dancing is not proved that can be associated with feelings, but give the idea that is important to be created remarkable moments. In my opinion, I agree that dancing can represent a culture for two reasons that are presented in the passage.
Firstly, Dancing can help to characterize a group; easily people could get together with the aim of left a footprint to the next generation and preserve the good customs. Hence, each culture adapt his story through songs and representative clothes in order to identified his dancing, thus exist a large variety of unique festivals and carnivals around the world. For example, the carnival of Rio de Janeiro, which held place on Brazil, in that activity hundreds of carrousels are passed by with a parade of dancers, all of that intend to show up the world what Brazilians are. On the other hand, as result of how the Mayas used to dance to give thanks for blessings delivered by their goods, the tradition has been transmitted for the past of time to newest generations for avoid forget the ancestors ideology.
Secondly, sharing interest make strong bonds. Likewise, couples that are falling in love, share something that is love each other, consequently if between them were not any interested, there will not a relationship. Similarly, happens with a culture, members that practice an activity like dance that identify them, probably they would create a friendship. For instance, two of my childhood friends: Mario and Rosy, they met at High school. However, they started to talk when the school recommend them an opportunity of attend to an extracurricular activity, so they danced together a Guatemalan Song in a festival of New York and by the time of one week later, they were obsessed with travel to the country to know about its traditions. Nonetheless, after ten years of the high school graduation, both of them got in marriage and finally visited the country which made them met better
In conclusion, dancing can avoid that a culture became extinct, for the purpose of take care of it with creating unique way to identified it.In the same way, it is time to mull over our future as society and what we want to be recognized for the next generation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 83, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the parties') or simply say ''most parties''.
Suggestion: most of the parties; most parties
...py for some people, perhaps is for that most of parties or celebrations events do not require b...
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Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'enjoy'
Suggestion: enjoy
... require blasting music by guests would enjoying, because they could not dance. Neverthe...
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Line 3, column 749, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the newest'.
Suggestion: to the newest
...s been transmitted for the past of time to newest generations for avoid forget the ancest...
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Line 3, column 792, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'ancestors'' or 'ancestor's'?
Suggestion: ancestors'; ancestor's
...newest generations for avoid forget the ancestors ideology. Secondly, sharing interes...
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Line 7, column 142, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...th creating unique way to identified it.In the same way, it is time to mull over o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, likewise, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, similarly, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91747572816 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73059439048 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606796116505 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.0474224572 48.9658058833 186% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.846153846 100.406767564 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.6923076923 20.6045352989 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 18.1538461538 5.45110844103 333% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12192882938 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451262479746 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409353398925 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0709739114428 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294805662824 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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