TPO 15 independent
agree or not
in order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Whether adolescents ough to manage their money from early ages to improve their financial responsibility is a convoluted controversy. On the one hand, some people believe that this is an unnecessary approach, and childeren must focus on their studies. On the other hand, others posit that it will be useful for teenagers inasmuch as they will learn the core meaning of the money and its function in their lives. In my point of view, I am inclined to the latter idea in spite of the fact that the former is more popular and have more aficionados among adults. My answer to this debating bone of contention is twofold, and in the following, the rationale behind it will be elaborated by the most outstanding, solid proofs.
The first and foremost rationalization which is worth mentioning is that by learning their asset management, childeren will become familiar with the places where they spend their money and can ommit unnecessary expenses. Researchers in RMIT University, the best leading academic institute in Australia, conducted a survey of teenagers among whom they disseminated a questionnaire and concluded that there is a direct exponential relation between the level of self-management of their money and their level of independency. In other words, the more eager they are to control their expenses, the higher level of independency they have. To put it into a more vivid picture, my cousin is used to checking his balance every day, and at the end of each month, he checks his expenses; therefore, he is completely aware of the useless activities and tries to gradually delete them from his monthly routines.
The secong and equally far-reaching reason to bear in mind is that childeren will learn how and where to invest their money so as to profit from it. As an illustration, when I was 13, I got used to saving at least 10% of my money every month; after two years, I bought a used concole, developed it, and then sold it for a higher price. I could have easily wasted both my money and time in gamenets, but I both realized the importance of money and increased my assets. Scholars announced that the trend of learning the exploitation of money among kids will have been increasedat least 20% by the end of 2050 owing to the fact that they are feeling the need for this knowledge. Moreover, now, as I am an adult, I am continually using my money in places that are useful; this is the main consequence of my efforts saving money when I was a kid.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned justifications into acount, I comply with this notion that childeren must try to manage their money as early as possible. By this action, they can ommit wasteful expenses and hobbies from their lives, and instead, they will consume their time and money on more profitable activities, such as investing in banks and stock markets. Still, there are a preponderance of mutually exclusive ideas regarding the merits and demerits of educating money management for childeren. Thus, neither my notion must be considered as the only positive belief, nor must others' explanations be overlooked.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whether adolescents ough to manage their money ...
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Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...arn how and where to invest their money so as to profit from it. As an illustration, whe...
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Line 7, column 395, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'preponderances'?
Suggestion: preponderances
...s and stock markets. Still, there are a preponderance of mutually exclusive ideas regarding t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, moreover, regarding, so, still, then, therefore, thus, as to, at least, in conclusion, such as, in other words, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2579.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 527.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89373814042 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86151782499 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512333965844 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 819.9 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.6917579197 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.277777778 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2777777778 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.11111111111 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189449657278 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656528553174 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055986953108 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119932886987 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0149080837259 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 86.8835125448 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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