TPO 20 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern world everything is constantly evolving and in order for people to belong in a strata they need to re-invent and acquire different knowledge to be successful. Some people believe that people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. In my humble opinion, I choose the former option. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, businessmen tries different approach to be on top of the market. Every little edge they think might get them to the ladder of success, they will grab it and never be afraid to explore their options. People who took risk and experiment have better results of being successful individuals, according to studies. It is because individuals can create a wild idea from being explorative and risk taker. For instance, Mark Zucherberg has been drop out of college and he did everything in his power to be successful. He was not afraid to take risk and try new things for him to create this wonderful app we all love "facebook". He was not afraid to have failure in life and continually perfected his social media application and it is used all over the world. He is the most powerful person and influential people of our generation today. To sum up, one of the key ingredient of being successful is taking risk and go what your instinct is telling you, that you will be great someday. Just follow what you want in life and pursue your passion because there is always something good at the end of it.
Secondly, the negative consequence of doing what you do well is that you will not be creative enough to think of other options. In other words, there are no room to grow and no place for improvement because individuals are in their comfort zone. Hence, they are satisfied with their performance and don't want to excel further. For example, I am a dialysis Nurse in Manila and I am very comfortable with my environment, co worker, patients and boss. I just work because I need to and I don't want to further push my self to become the best in my field. I may say that patients loved my work ethics but there are other ways to improve my skills but I am hesitant to further expand my knowledge in my career. Maybe because I am afraid to try something new or even take risk and my work routine will be ruined. All in all, I can become more proficient Nurse if I just push my self and not be satisfied that I performed good at work.
To summarize, I believe that being successful person means you are not afraid to take risk and try something new in your life. This is because taking risk can have positive outcome like having a new idea or gain new knowledge.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a stratum' or simply 'strata'?
Suggestion: a stratum; strata
...ng and in order for people to belong in a strata they need to re-invent and acquire diff...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tion and it is used all over the world. He is the most powerful person and influen...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...re satisfied with their performance and dont want to excel further. For example, I a...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, i feel, first of all, i am afraid, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2216.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 493.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49492900609 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58832749236 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488843813387 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 694.8 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.9919934116 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.3333333333 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5416666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95833333333 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249509357687 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752717028576 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118205212129 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179788608243 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0831233554486 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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