Adult life is one of the prime part of our life which required having many skills. There are many ways, young people can do in their life to prepare for this life. In my opinion, learning from part-time job experience is one of the best process to become a good citizen to the society and the country. I feel this way for two most important reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, teenagers can learn many skills from part-time job. In the job life, you need many skills like communication skills, know other's psychology, help others, etc. You cannot learn those qualification without involving real life experience, and doing part-time job you can enhance your chance to getting your dream jobs too. My personal experience is the compelling example of this. After finishing my school life, I admitted college, and I started a part-time job in a local newspaper. I spent only two hours in each week day, so my education did not impeded by it. However, I gradually learned how to talk with others in the interview, how to write an article, and way of doing everything with great care. Those all skills were helped me to join national newspaper as a sport journalist. Therefore, parents should ask their young child to do a part-time job.
Secondly, a part-time job might help to complete education smoothly. In many case, tuition fees and other cost is the main culprit for stopped schools of many students. On the other hand, a part-time provides enough money which could be use as education cost, and can ensure education. For example, my college friend whose name is Shamim faced a financial crisis after his father dead. The situation became very worst after his mother got sick. He need to support his family from that time, and first he decided to stop his education, but then he changed his mind. He stared learning in during his part-time jobs too. He managed to save some handsome money from that job, and he got admitted the university which he dreamt in his childhood. He did very good in his academic because he learned many things from his jobs which was relevant to his course work. Since he worked as a salesman in a supper-market, he experienced many calculation in at place. Thus he properly finished his education because of unintermitted flow of money from his job.
In conclusion, it is obvious from the essay that young people should do some extra work like part-time jobs for being an proper human being or an effective citizen in the country. It's important because it enables people to learn many things in early, and because it provide a monetary backup for tuition fee in their student life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 785, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...lped me to join national newspaper as a sports journalist. Therefore, parents should a...
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Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...ls of many students. On the other hand, a part-time provides enough money which could be us...
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Line 5, column 624, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...rning in during his part-time jobs too. He managed to save some handsome money fro...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...rsity which he dreamt in his childhood. He did very well in his academic because h...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Message: Did you mean 'provides'?
Suggestion: provides
...rn many things in early, and because it provide a monetary backup for tuition fee in th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in many cases, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2205.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77272727273 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57164446599 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528138528139 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.639436886 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.8076923077 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7692307692 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65384615385 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248896713852 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789133678837 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633636409942 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176730748162 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0897543355813 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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