TPO 24 independent writing
In the modern era, teenagers are more prepared for their future lives. The various factors have played roles in this issue. Some believe that psychologists must consider the vast options to be confident which can be more helpful. Among them, encouraging teenagers takes a part-time job would be useful. Although some are inclined toward it, som hold an opposite view. From my perspective, the former' s group idea is more convincing. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will elaborate on my points of view cogently.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that if they do not learn to be responsible for the teenager's time, they will adapt to this hard in the future, as a result, it certainly prepares them for taking more sense of responsibility in their future lives. To clarify it more, when I was working in kindergarten during my education time, I got experienced how to be cautious about children's needs during the day and it was helped in my own life how much I pay attention to my son.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating this issue is that the skill of being sociable enforce in them. Admittedly, before entering the society they embarrass and feel shy. However, it helped them not only being sociable but also being cooperative. To take a personal experience as an example, my brother was very self- esteem and introvert, but after taking the job he learned how to cooperate with other people to reach the main goal of the organization. Without a shadow of a doubt, if he would not experience it, he will face a severe problem later in his career.
Finally, it is an indisputable fact that they become more independent. they gain experience in how to manage their money and save it to control and improve their life. The result of the study at the Tehran University, one of the most prestigious universities in my country, indicates that these children are more successful in comparison to other children who did not have this experience.
In brief, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that the benefits of it outweigh its drawbacks, and undoubtedly they can develop some of their skills and ability to get victorious in the future.
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| 2021-08-05 | Kamyar Mirzaei | 76 | view |
| 2020-01-13 | Raziya | 42 | view |
| 2020-01-09 | naziii | 3 | view |
| 2019-08-07 | Lofou | 60 | view |
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 72, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...fact that they become more independent. they gain experience in how to manage their ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 215, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...bility to get victorious in the future.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, so, in brief, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1815.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85294117647 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84304072277 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577540106952 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5265151397 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.833333333 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7777777778 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61111111111 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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