TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

Most people work five days a week and are two days off. Today, work balance is considered important today. Long hours of labor cause a decrease in work efficiency and harm people health.Sometimes, long hours of labor is ridiculed as sabotage. Therefore, people discuss appropriate work days in a week and style for work. I argue that shortening daily work hours is enjoyable than increasing the number of holidays. To assist my opinion, I will state the reasons from aspects of physical and psychological in following paragraphs.

Regarding physical, the human has limits at the concentration, and recovery of physical fitness. Firstly, The concentration.
From a medical standpoint, people's concentration ability is limited to about forty minutes. Therefore, when working hours are long, people prone to lose their concentration and get frustrated or tired with their work.However, In shorter hours work, people can have done the job with focus. To be able to work efficiently makes people comfortable.
Secondly, recovery of physical fitness. When people hardly tired, the tiredness will be continuing to the next day.
Whether fatigue remains on the next day or not, depends on depends on the degree of fatigue. For example,
The next day I ran the marathon, I am exhausted, and become a muscle pain. Nevertheless, I will not be tired the next day I ran about 5 kilometers. Similar things happen at work. Hence, shorter hours work is better than more extended hours works.

Furthermore, psychologically, shorter hours work brings happy daily afternoon to you. Long hours worker goes home and goes to bed after work. On the other hand, you can choose your activity after work. You have the choices that play with friends or drink with colleagues or spend time at home or do as you like. You can choose what you want. People are satisfied when doing what they want to do. If you send a satisfying day, next day you can vigorously do the job. In addition, The long holiday causes a rebound and depression. For example, In Japan, the first day after summer vacation has the highest rate of suicide.
Many people depress after the long holiday.

In conclusion, Because short hours workers benefit both psychologically and physically than long hours workers. I rather work only three days for long hours than five days for shorter hours.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in short, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1963.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05927835052 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82888152403 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533505154639 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5872327119 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.4333333333 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.9333333333 20.6045352989 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.53405017921 198% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.420802026277 0.236089414692 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105264179022 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971342504592 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15106564015 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121085976177 0.0645574589148 188% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.18 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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