TPO-31- Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
People say that we are living in an fast-changing society which enables its people to enjoy more than ever opportuniteis and the fruits of developments. Living in one of the most competitve and developed city, Hong Kong, for over 7 years, my experience is that the fast-changing world make today's people less happy and less satisfied then past generations. There are two reasons for this pathetic phenomenon.
First, a world full of quick changes requires its people to change themselves to keep the same pace with the world. Otherwise, it is very likely that those people will be discarded by the world. One very typical example is the career of a programmer. Today's rapid change in IT technology demands every programmer to contribute a great amount of leisure time to self-study the latest technology in the office. A programme leader from ZTE,a Chinese telecommunication company, died from overworking in the office. Newspaper says that the leader has spent over 70 hours per week on average to learn the latest voice-engine technology which will be used in ZTE's new product. Another example is that a world-famous company, Huawei, demands all its programmers over 35 years old to leave their positions because those people's study ability may not meet the latest change in technology. Either you overwork to catch the pace of the world, or be discarded by the world. Judge from the two cases above, there is little reason for me to believe today's people are happier.
Second, people are more difficult to be satisfied in today's world. This is because the world changes so fast. Back to 1940s, most people will be very glad should they have a warm cotton suit in winter. Along with the quick changes in texture industry, more and more cloths have been made to meet people's demand. The cotton is too heavy, so we have nylon. Nylon is not that waterproof, so the world brought us Gore-Tex. As a result, more and more people are chasing after top cloths. People are no longer feel satisfied if we give them cotton clothes in winter. Instead, they will say, "I want Gore-Tex, cotton is too heavy". It is the change in the world that make people more demanding then everbefore, and therefore people are less satisfied.
All in all, the fast-changing world forces many people to sacrifice their time to catch up changes. The world also made people more and more demanding. That is why people are less happy and satisfied.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 34, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
People say that we are living in an fast-changing society which enables its...
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Line 3, column 438, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , a
... the office. A programme leader from ZTE,a Chinese telecommunication company, died...
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Line 3, column 834, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ions because those peoples study ability may not meet the latest change in techno...
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Line 3, column 995, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e world. Judge from the two cases above, there is little reason for me to believe...
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Line 5, column 699, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...e world that make people more demanding then everbefore, and therefore people are le...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89371980676 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63929539535 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509661835749 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.6633217849 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.04 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.56 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.68 5.45110844103 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302177703614 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928039289975 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0751426498652 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20652686658 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354237721032 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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