TPO 39
Without a doubt, having a satisfactory and paramount job in a successful future is of great importance. While many believe that choosing a secure job that will lead to a decent future was convenient in the past, others strongly assume that in today’s sophisticated world the hardship of identifying a successful career is less than before. Personally speaking, I agree with the latter perspective and believe that it is more straightforward today to select a job leading to a desired and satisfactory future than in the past. The reasons to support my idea are illustrated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, I am of the opinion that in today’s revolutionary era, people have more access to the most update information due to technological improvement. In this regard, state-of-the-art technology has help mankind to acquire the knowledge they need to not only compare different jobs but also recognize the most needed careers in the future. Knowing this information will help one to identify the work suitable for him/her based on his/her characteristics and even to choose the job that has more chance of success. As an illustration, when I wanted to select my major to enroll in the university, I performed structural researches by utilizing the internet or enjoying experts’ ideas in the foreign countries by talking to them using Skype or e-mail. The information I obtained by these methods helped me in identifying the best career to ensure a respectable future based on my own attributes. Had I not used these improved technologies, I would not have been able to choose the most promising major and in turn, a successful job.
Moreover, the advent of new job opportunities as a result of the progressing life has made new and most essential jobs available. Furthermore, nowadays people need new services to have more convenient life, in return, we could accomplish a great sense of achievement by identifying the jobs that could facilitate or present these kinds of services to the people needing them. My intimate friend’s experience is a compelling example of this notion. He started an internet-based job which provided people with home services activities like painting, cleaning, cooking, etc. Presenting these kinds of services to people was a real success since in today’s world, compared to the past, they are preoccupied with their jobs and do not have sufficient time to perform house chores. If people have enough time and energy to perform their own house’s tasks, his new job would not be a success.
In a nutshell, having all the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, we conclude that in comparison to the past, it is unchallenging task to identify a secure career to guarantee a successful future because not only we have access to more technological devices but also the today’s people needs have grown which will end to more promising job opportunities.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, while, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2466.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16981132075 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20279583967 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507337526205 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 784.8 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.7251544989 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.058823529 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0588235294 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41176470588 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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