TPO 39: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As you know one of the key factors of happiness in life is job satisfaction. As people spend most of their daily time at work and their job determines and guarantees their financial power, it is highly crucial to choose a job that has a secure future. In this respect, some people hold the view that today it is not easy to find a job with a secure and bright future. From my own perspective, this statement is true due to some reasons. Among different reasons which support my idea, I will delve into the most conspicuous ones in the following paragraphs.
The most prominent issue which should be taken into account seriously is that if we exclude the academician strata and the related jobs in the academic sphere which are considered highly secured jobs, virtually 70% of the remaining members of society have to search for a job in the free markets and business areas. These kinds of jobs have a strong correlation with political affairs and the overall economic condition of a country. In developing countries that do not have formed a strong economic structure yet, these jobs apparently experience ebbs and flows with the political decisions of the government attorneys. For instance, in Iran, the automobile industry was really fruitful in a period of time, but after increasing tension between Iran and some western nations and the following sanctions, lots of automobile companies bankrupted. Hence, for a majority of people, it is difficult to predict the future of a job or identify secure jobs.
Another important point coming to my mind is about technological advancements. As you know, nowadays technology is growing at a fast pace and also create new professions. These new carriers are usually popular and profitable but barely for a maximum of 6 years and then may be replaced by other jobs. For instance about 10 years ago, internet cafes were really popular as they have access to high-speed internet and most people prefer to go there and surf the internet. Those days you could hardly find a free computer system and internet cafes were always busy. But a few years later, by the arrival of personal computers, tablets, and smartphones and broad access to the internet, internet cafes became obsolete. Therefore, in our modern era, it is hard to determine which job would have a reliable future.
To sum up, we can confidently draw the conclusion that as most of the available jobs are highly affected by variable factors like political affairs and also technological developments constantly creates some jobs and abolishes others, it is definitely hard to identify which job would have a secure and successful future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As you know one of the key factors of happ...
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Line 3, column 694, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...obile industry was really fruitful in a period of time, but after increasing tension between I...
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Line 5, column 810, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...which job would have a reliable future. To sum up, we can confidently draw the ...
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Line 7, column 324, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ld have a secure and successful future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, hence, if, may, really, so, then, therefore, for instance, you know, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95056179775 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75062421902 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548314606742 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.4477432441 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.388888889 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7222222222 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61111111111 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144822900457 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0457473793273 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0334059760124 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.093510985835 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341916984669 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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