TPO-39- In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that for young people make decision about what kinds of job can ensurence a good life in the future, is a big challenge. However, the new development in our society create more possibility to predict the type of jobs lead to a secure successful life in the future. Contrary, to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that the modern societies are altering continiousely, but in the past societies had more stability than today. I, to a great extent disagree with this idea that in the past it was easier to find out that what taype of job would lead to a successful life.
First and foremost, today's governments create a lot of organizations to find the number and type of jobs that would be needed for future years. In this shape they regulate the number of people that arrive to universities, in this shape that the number of people who arrive to universities are fit with future job avaiable. In this condition youg people have more confidence when they want to choose their field of study. because thay do not afride about if they study in their favorite study area, they have will be have lower chance to find a good job.
On another significant fact that should be taken into the consideration is that today there are a lot od web sitises and databases that put valuable information about types of jobs and qualities than needed to obtain these jobs. This information give more clear veiw to young people to find their interest. In addithion, this databases categorise jobs based on amoung of salary in each year and demund. Conversely, in the past not only there was not any of these information banks, but also, a lot of people study in one field and after several tears they found out that this is not their favorite field of study or their is not any demund for their especial skilles.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that today it is easier ti identify what type of jobs lead whould led to a good life. Because today governments have more percise plan for organizing jobs and people have better perspective about jobs and amount of demund for them .
- TPO 50 3
- Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. 73
- TPO 37 3
- young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their community 95
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Because
...ey want to choose their field of study. because thay do not afride about if they study ...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...e to find their interest. In addithion, this databases categorise jobs based on amou...
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Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...is not their favorite field of study or their is not any demund for their especial sk...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...about jobs and amount of demund for them .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, however, if, so, still, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49247943988 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484210526316 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.9489524475 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.214285714 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1428571429 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07142857143 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219875702134 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0870666718649 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0927304515749 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148531769898 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0939642252731 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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