TPO 45
It is an inevitable fact that parents have pivotal role in shaping their kid's future. Not only parents have role in fulfilling children's basic needs for growing physically, but also they have more vital role in shaping their characteristic and bright future. Some people believe that in the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions and today they are more independent and can make their decisions about their own lives. I firmly agree with this statement. The following paragraphs will aptly vindicate my point of view.
The most prominent point to be mentioned is that, today young children are more aware of life's issue. The more educated the young people are, the more independent and self-governed they are. In fact, as a result of development in technology and extending the social medias, the young people are more up-to-date about society's issue and what is going on in government. In the past, children were more rely on their parents to do such an initial decision of daily life. Taking myself as an example, at school-age I was not able to opt a suitable sport as my hobby. I was always worried about what is appropriate for me to do according to my personality and abilities. I also had problem in choosing my field of interest in art class. In a word, I was in a dilemma between being an artist or an athlete. In this regard, my parents were my major incentive in making my own decisions. Since I was not able to choose my way, their interest had an effect on my choices too. Nowadays there are a myriads of helpful ways such as internet, virtual world, books and so forth that guide young people in opting their way of success.
Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that today, parents are more educated and aware of their kids' demand. Hence, parents try to flourish their children be independent in their early ages of life. In a word, parents try to teach them fishing instead of giving them a fish. Furthermore, children are more self-confident and also able to distinguish between good and bad. As a result, parents feel more confidence about their kids decision and just support them over a glass window! Recent studies conducted in society have revealed that children who make their own decisions in early-ages are more successful in the future. Because each person is more aware of his/her interests.
Taking all the aforementioned into account, it can be concluded that flowering children in a way that they feel independent are more useful. Parents should show a way to their kids and they would be kids themselves that make a final decision. Science developments are also an aid to parents' role in shaping their kids' bright future.
- TPO 40 Integrated 76
- In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. 70
- Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends. a. joining a sports team, b. participating in community activities, c. traveling. 70
- TPO 10: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on specific points made reading passage. 73
- TPO 46 Integerated 85
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 102, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...children are more aware of lifes issue. The more educated the young people are, the...
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Line 2, column 986, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a myriad' or simply 'myriads'?
Suggestion: a myriad; myriads
...t on my choices too. Nowadays there are a myriads of helpful ways such as internet, virtu...
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Line 3, column 630, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ages are more successful in the future. Because each person is more aware of his/her in...
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Line 4, column 334, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...le in shaping their kids bright future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, so, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2233.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80215053763 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65204105762 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470967741935 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 706.5 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9883319152 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.32 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.72 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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