TPO 45- independent writing taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.Use s
decision making is one of the critical concerns of people around the world in any ages. Needless to say that young people need some help because of they are a low experience people. some people may find that teenagers are really much dependence on their parents decision making from the past, since they think it is crucial to take corret decision all time. However, I firmly of the belief that young people are better than eny time could get best decision. The following underlying reasons are going to substantiate my stand-points.
The first fact that holds me this concept is that higher education which today young people mostly have. it can be illustrated that everywhere people have more knowledge about live and it consequence the could make better decision independetly. In fact, the best way the make perfect decision is to know about it or read and learn. For example, when I was persuading my family business at the bakery equipment distribution company few years ago, I realized thet we have weakness in our production saling; so, I call one of my geniuse friend on the networking and economic field to give me some advice. after a while, I make perfect decision to design a website to sales our production online; therfore, I become young start-up after one years and got reward from the government. Thus, this opportunity couldn't happen if my higher education as well as my friend ones wouldn't gain in the university, or I was depend on my dad old-fashion trade.
Another reason is that lots of high technology could help young people whom like to be success. I read several article about how to become successable parents at Iranian society journal four months ago. they analyze the various impacts of perfect parents; hence, they assume that becoming perfect parents it doesn't mean that make your child to become engineer or doctor. In fact, best parents are who make their children mind free from sad and unhapiness in order to helped them to become anythings the want in the future. therefore, with today high tecnology and internet young people could make perfect decision independetly. also, with the modern technology parents could observe their children life totally and rarely become to the seen since some of experience is crucial for teenager. I can remember my personal experoence when I was studynig in power electronics at the Sharif university nine years ago, my father couldn't advice me to give best decision since he doesn't know more about my major. so, he says to me '' become success and be perfect human entire of your life''. therfore, it seems reasonable that teenager could make best deciosion if they want.
In conclusion, though some may oppose the concept today young people are better to become independent. Not only becuase the could make perfect deciosion by higher edecation, but also they can use lots of technology to become success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Decision
decision making is one of the critical concerns ...
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Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because they' instead.
Suggestion: because they
...to say that young people need some help because of they are a low experience people. some peopl...
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Suggestion: Some
...se of they are a low experience people. some people may find that teenagers are real...
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Suggestion: It
...n which today young people mostly have. it can be illustrated that everywhere peop...
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Suggestion: After
... economic field to give me some advice. after a while, I make perfect decision to des...
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Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one year', 'a year', or simply 'years'?
Suggestion: one year; a year; years
...therfore, I become young start-up after one years and got reward from the government. Thu...
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Suggestion: couldn't
... the government. Thus, this opportunity couldnt happen if my higher education as well a...
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Suggestion: wouldn't
...her education as well as my friend ones wouldnt gain in the university, or I was depend...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...ouldnt gain in the university, or I was depend on my dad old-fashion trade. Another...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun article seems to be countable; consider using: 'several articles'.
Suggestion: several articles
... people whom like to be success. I read several article about how to become successable parents...
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Suggestion: They
...ranian society journal four months ago. they analyze the various impacts of perfect ...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...assume that becoming perfect parents it doesnt mean that make your child to become eng...
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Suggestion: Therefore
...ecome anythings the want in the future. therefore, with today high tecnology and internet...
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Suggestion: Also
...uld make perfect decision independetly. also, with the modern technology parents cou...
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Suggestion: couldn't
...if university nine years ago, my father couldnt advice me to give best decision since h...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'give the best'.
Suggestion: give the best
...ars ago, my father couldnt advice me to give best decision since he doesnt know more abou...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...dvice me to give best decision since he doesnt know more about my major. so, he says t...
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Suggestion: So
...nce he doesnt know more about my major. so, he says to me become success and be p...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...w more about my major. so, he says to me become success and be perfect human enti...
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Suggestion: Therfore
...d be perfect human entire of your life. therfore, it seems reasonable that teenager coul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2396.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93004115226 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53907547465 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508230452675 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 765.9 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7736380496 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.909090909 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0909090909 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293595690159 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0983188032234 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733877794108 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198367180468 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690124094653 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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