TPO 29 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Increase education quality of the university is the one of the most concerns of the government. Needless to say that money has undeniable impact of the human in recent years. Some people may find professors' salaries increasing not the first choice of university money spending area, whereas others would take the revese. Even thought some may find professors salaries extremely high since there are higher than them income. Nevertheless, I firmly of the belief that it would be increase more than the past. The underlying reasons are going to substaniate my stand-points.
The first concept that holds me this idea is that university should reduce life issue of the professors and free up full capacity of their mind in order to put it on science. It can be illustrated that every person has limit capacity of mind; hence, if he had many financal problem, he couldn't concentrate on espesific thing. I can remember my personal experience when I was studying the power electronics at the Sharif university ten years ago, I had a genius teacher in the induction generators. After a while, his ability to teaching decreased considerably and he didn't participate in some of the class or become very late. We realized that one of his family member had a cancer and he must work until the midnight in order to earn extra money; so, he slept instead of some classes. Thus, it can be seen, this condition wouldn't occur if he earn sufficient money from teaching.
Another reason is that addintional finance should persuade keen students to become professor. I read several articles about my future career a few years ago. The analyze the various finance salary of the career ; hence, they assume that becoming sturt-up is one of the most high salary job in the world. In fact, on of the articles estimates that approximately 150 percent of start-up people earn more than average. Therefore many people as well as keen students like to become a reach so they choice is being start-up. For example, when I was persuading my family business at the bakery equipment distribution company three years ago, I realized that I didn't like my job anymore since I love to become a professor and write many articles on the journal. Recently, I change my choice to study for the PHD on the another country only because of the higher income. Therefore, it seems reasonable to assume from this experience that better students become better professor if only salary of them improve.
In conclusion, though some may oppose the concept, professors salaraies should increase more by help of the government and university. Not only because it improves their ability to become a perfect professor, but also it can increase quality if the university at long time since more keen student shows more interest. Every people should help to reduce professor's life issue in order to help society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: didn't
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Suggestion: some
...onsiderably and he didnt participate in some of the class or become very late. We realized ...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'earns'.
Suggestion: earns
...een, this condition wouldnt occur if he earn sufficient money from teaching. Anoth...
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...about my future career a few years ago. The analyze the various finance salary of the caree...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Suggestion: didn't
...pany three years ago, I realized that I didnt like my job anymore since I love to bec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2380.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92753623188 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66133908699 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507246376812 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 777.6 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8551377012 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.47826087 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109324653998 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0344857683853 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359452913427 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.07422801321 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333668955998 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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