TPO 47- independent agree or nor: it is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life
As technology advances and develops, we are able to access an assorted of information happening worldwide. In contrast to those who are only concerned about their own business, I personally agree that it is tremendously important and necessary to know about the events occurring, even though they might seem unrelated to our life. In the following essay, I will be presenting my perspective of views by illustrating reasons in different aspects.
First, as a member in this global society, events happening to others can as well be as an experience we can borrow from. For example, the pandemic COVID-19 originated in Wu-Han, where we didn't ever think would be near, has gone viral in the rest of the world after just a few months. The amount of masks needed was desperately much more than expected, resulting people insanely sweeping all the masks from the shelves. On the contrary, in Taiwan, it was not only because of our prompt reaction to the disease but also a similar experience 17 years ago coping with the epidemic that made us take action to prevent the 'invasion' of the disease coming into our own country.
Secondly, which is also what I think worth-mentioning, if one has an investment on assets, what can never be neglected is the rapidly-changed stock market, which may be strongly influenced by the global incidents. For example, not long ago, the government of the U.S. announced the prohibition of the use for Hua-Wei components, resulting in a massive drop on the stock price of Hua-Wei. If investors are not aware of the policies made in the United States, they will probably undergo a huge loss due to their negligence.
To sum up, our world has been dramatically changed by the advancements no matter in communications and transportation technologies which we rely on in our every day life. Consequently, people learn from the news in every part of our planet despite the fact that it is sometimes seemingly irrelevant. By obtaining information, we could also seize the opportunities and make better decision.
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- TPO 47 independent agree or nor it is important to know about events happening around the world even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...rating reasons in different aspects. First, as a member in this global societ...
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...xample, the pandemic COVID-19 originated in Wu-Han, where we didnt ever think wou...
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...OVID-19 originated in Wu-Han, where we didnt ever think would be near, has gone vira...
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...w months. The amount of masks needed was desperately much more than expected, res...
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...disease coming into our own country. Secondly, which is also what I think wor...
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...a huge loss due to their negligence. To sum up, our world has been dramatical...
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...pportunities and make better decision.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for example, i think, in contrast, in contrast to, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1704.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99706744868 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00251726876 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609970674487 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.0942652824 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.076923077 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2307692308 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2307692308 5.45110844103 206% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120550363372 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0384299664283 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623073999604 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0770749774238 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0796171091313 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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