TPO 51
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, there is no doubt that nowadays, by developing technological devices, television programs play an important role in our life. No one can deny the effects of television and movies on our private life. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is evaluating the television and movies effects on our children behavior. Some people may hold this viewpoint that movies and televisions have adverse impacts on young people behavior. However, some others may take the opposite viewpoint and believe that young people behavior is more affected by the positive impact of television and movies. As for this writer opinion, I subscribe to the lateral idea. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reason to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first compelling reason corroborating my stance is that television plays a pivotal role in enhancing people information about different science and knowledge. it is crystal clear that most people spend much more of their leisure time using television news and programs. Accordingly, television programs could help them in order to have up-to-date news. it is worth to say that people can not trust online news they receive throughout websites and other social networks. Moreover, many tv programs help people to enhance their scientific knowledge like animals behavior programs, other planet specification, and so on. By way of illustration, I use tv programs in my leisure time in order to increase my knowledge in robotics field by an awesome tv program named how we could build a two-leg robot. In this program, people could learn about the basics of robotics and robotic parts, and also, they can make their own robot throughout tv program lessons. this example clearly illustrates the role of television in our daily life.
Furthermore, most of the tv program and movies could show the result of good and bad behavior in our life. A survey conducted by experts from Oxford university shows that over 75% of young people change their bad behavior after watching the result of improper behave in movies. To illustrate this idea, let’s consider the following example. my friend Arash is addicted to some calming tablets, and he could not concentrate on his courses without using these pills. At the same time, A television movie was shown about the result of using calming pills every night. he watched this movie unintentionally, and he found out how these tablets could be destructive on his body. Therefore, he got rid of these destructive tablets. after two weeks of resistance, he not only can concentrate on his course and works but also he gets high scores in his university courses.
The main conclusion to be drawn from this writing is that there are positive and negative effects in all-new technological devices and programs.it depend on us how we use these new devices. For the sake of brevity, a couple of points are worth reiterating: first, television plays a critical role in our daily life by receiving much useful information; Second, there are many proper movies could help young people to improve their behavior. I firmly contend that by evaluating the merits and demerits of the idea, not only it be recognized as an evidence-based, but also it can be accepted speculatively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, so, therefore, as for, in conclusion, no doubt, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2759.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 540.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10925925926 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82314738894 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501851851852 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 866.7 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5428954442 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.115384615 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7692307692 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80769230769 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182430824991 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543182792872 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459935599359 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116911846616 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045958483796 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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