TPO10
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them
Computors are striking technology nowadays that rapidly developed over a short period of time. playing computer games by a young age group is a major concern for family and society, therefore many arguments appear recently about shall children spend their time on it or not. In my view, playing computer games is a disaster and lead to fulfilling time with non-beneficial thing. I feel this way because it is an addictive process and distract student from there school work and subjects.
First of all, The addicting character of video games is obviously seen recently, students not only play the game for few hours or at their break time, but they are also playing it most of the day without conscious to time spent. In addition, these games are long and need many hours to pass it, also there are many chapters and editions that need to be completed. my personal experience is a compelling example. when i was young i used to play igi which is a war game that contain a lot of levels to succeed it, therefore i did not stand up from my chair unless i finish the level, as a result, i lept for only few hours and i had an eye problems lead to wear a glasses to correct it.
Second, all this time spent would be beneficial in studying and doing homework. feeling lazy all the day, wake up tierd and loss of concentration will lead to low performance in school and a bad evaluation at the end.For instant, when i was at the seventh grade my scores were very bad because i recognized a new game and start to play it a lot without care of my studying, but the second exams i took after i get rid of the game were perfectly done.
In conclusion, I am with openion that computer games are waste of time. this is because its addictive and nonbeneficial.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, second, so, therefore, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1451.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52024922118 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56075145341 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566978193146 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.5226485651 48.9658058833 195% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.916666667 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.75 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 5.45110844103 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258482573773 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990601987278 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0881918481656 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169470466314 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482452656935 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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