TPO15.In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In our new era, one of people's serious challenges is financial issues of personal life such as managing costs and debts, so training plays a significant role in improving the societies' economic function. I completely agree with the mentioned statement that teaching children about managing their own money will benefit them in adulthood since they have learnt how to be financially responsible. I explore my reasons in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, I believe children are more capable of learning effectively and easily rather than adults. According to psychologists, a young child's mind is empty of information, so it tends to absorb knowledge readily from the environment. one of essential topics to teach children is financial subject. For example, if parents give their child an amount of money every week and ask them to control their expenditure to save a part of their money for buying the toy that they like, the child started to think about the concept of money and its value differently from other children who did not have the same experience. this way the parents help their yougesters to attain a wisdom of economic issues [t1] and being able to handle their financial responsibilities in future. that's why I take the opinion that teaching children about money enables them to function as financial responsible members of a society.
Moreover, it takes a long time to develop a behavioral skill such as responsibility, so it is inevitable that if there is a desire for responsible adults, tutoring process should initiate soon in childhood. All people’s personal experiences shape up their characteristics such as responsibility during their life time, so it seem better to begin this long journey sooner to have responsible people in upcoming decades. For instance, when I come to think of my friends and relatives, I figure out that the ones whose parents did not trust their abilities to manage their money in the past, usually have problem with their debts now. because of being controlled by someone else in the whole childhood, they did not skilled to be responsible about different things such as money they have borrowed. one of these people is my nephew who is started to develop his managing skills when he struggled with financial irresponsibility since he spend 8000$ of his credit card but his salary is not as high as it should to return this amount of money. it takes him five or six years and a lot of efforts to learn and put to practice the things he have learnt from his experience. Therefore, for having financially responsible adults it is preferable to teach related skills in childhood.
To sum up, I think that tutoring children how to save and control their money is an important step in having financially responsible adults in future. Not only because the children's mind especially at their young ages is ready to easily assimilate every single data, but also learning behavioral skills such as being responsible would takes a long time to establish.
[t1]Obtain a wisdom of economic issues through practical experiences
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2592.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 511.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07240704501 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90376275087 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500978473581 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 808.2 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.9588976355 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.421052632 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8947368421 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251713948805 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080838802111 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420810150806 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139096540161 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751797956387 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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