TPO45:
In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better to able to make decision about their own lives.
Some people believe that young people rely on their parents to make the choice in the past but others disagree with it. From my perspective, I agree this argument since today young people have more education, technology development and financial independence. I will explore my reasons in the following essay.
First of all, it is crucial to make the right decisions, and having more education provides young people are capable of making right decisions. In the past, young people have to ask their parents to assist them to choose their decisions; however, nowadays, young people who have high education can make their own decisions. For example, my friend, who wanted to assign his graduate subject, chose his favorite subject rather than the one that his parents told him. He did many research because he knew the favorite subject could be his career. As a result, having more education provides young people to make decisions by themselves.
Secondly, getting information for elsewhere is important to young people, because it offers many useful information to help young people to make decisions and the technology development available to young people to do so. Take one of my own experience as an example. When I was a university students, my parents wanted me to live in the school's dorm. Nonetheless, I told my parents that the dorm was expensive so I decided to rent an apartment outside the campus. Therefore, I did many research on the internet and looked for rental advertisements to convince my parents. Finally, I parents consented to my suggestion. Consequently, the technology development not only provides young people a way to get information, but also gives them to make decisions on their own lives.
Last but not least, since young people are willing to be independent, and financial independence makes them to do their own decision. In the past, parents strict their children's decision by using financial problems. When young people are able to earn the money by themselves, they do not have to worry about this problems and they can make decisions by themselves. Conversely, today, more and more people are able to earn money instead of depended on their parents. As a consequence, this helps young people to make decisions about their own lives.
In conclusion, many people consider that, in the past, young people depended on their parents. I agree with this statement since young people in today have more education, technology development and financial independence.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 473, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[2]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun research seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much research', 'a good deal of research'.
Suggestion: much research; a good deal of research
...e one that his parents told him. He did many research because he knew the favorite subject co...
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Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much useful information', 'a good deal of useful information'.
Suggestion: much useful information; a good deal of useful information
...tant to young people, because it offers many useful information to help young people to make decisions ...
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Line 5, column 338, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...ts, my parents wanted me to live in the schools dorm. Nonetheless, I told my parents th...
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Line 5, column 482, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun research seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much research', 'a good deal of research'.
Suggestion: much research; a good deal of research
...nt outside the campus. Therefore, I did many research on the internet and looked for rental a...
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Line 5, column 584, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'parent'
Suggestion: parent
...ents to convince my parents. Finally, I parents consented to my suggestion. Consequentl...
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Line 7, column 309, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...selves, they do not have to worry about this problems and they can make decisions by...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, conversely, finally, first, however, look, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12958435208 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81701640868 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444987775061 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9226914116 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3636363636 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5909090909 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.59090909091 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.546529219314 0.236089414692 231% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180022384896 0.076458572812 235% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138772356624 0.0737576698707 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.346298557982 0.150856017488 230% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0909003819288 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.