Automobiles are one of the most essential parts of every contemporary society. Without transportation, the area which an individual can travel will be very limited. It is stated that the number of vehicles will be lower compared with nowadays. However, I disagree with this statement for two reasons.
To begin with, the price of cars will be lower in future. If we carefully investigate the price of automobiles during the previous decades, we will see that the price of them will be much lower in comparison with the past. This is due to the advancement in technology in conjunction with the more efficient of manufacturing methods. There is not any signal that this trend is going to be stopped in the near future. Therefore, the price of cars will be lower year on year. As a consequence of this, people will be encouraged to purchase more new vehicles. Moreover, the car manufacturing companies are consistently trying to finance their products in various ways. This will in turn motivates people to purchase new cars, especially those who cannot afford to buy one without these incentives. For example, one of my friends had problem finding a suitable car for his budget. Suddenly, he came across a brochure of a dealer which proposed a very good loan with a low interest rate. Hence, he decided to purchase a new car.
Aside from this fact that vehicles are less expensive compared with the past, the population on earth is increasing continuously. Therefore, there will be less available space in public transports, especially in big cities because the rate of growth in public transports facilities is lower than the population increasing. As a result, people will be encouraged to buy personal automobiles in order to alleviate the public transportation problem. For example, there is always a shortage of capacity in Tehran's subway. I know a lot of people who used to travel with subway every day. However, they changed their mind because of hardships they encounter as a result of this shortage in capacity.
In conclusion, although some people may think the number of vehicles will be lower in twenty years, I think that the number of them will be increased because of the lower prices of the cars and population growth.
- TPO 3: Agree or disagree: It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. 60
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 48, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...n with, the price of cars will be lower in future. If we carefully investigate the price ...
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Line 3, column 915, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... Suddenly, he came across a brochure of a dealer which proposed a very good loan...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, for example, i think, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 13.8261648746 7% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1868.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9549071618 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8612711317 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506631299735 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.3030833174 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.9090909091 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1363636364 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13636363636 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276320711392 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825535003327 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0899402336037 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166054005753 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0533856926496 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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