Which one do you prefer? Why?
– a company offering you a job with challenging and interesting projects but less vacation days or – another company offering you a job that is not so challenging and interesting but has more vacation days.
In the modern-day, job plays a prominent role in all societies. Owing to its paramount importance, a large number of scientists have always been searching for ways to enhance job satisfaction. A controversial question that deserves some words here is whether people prefer to have a career without any challenges, but it has a lot of vacation days, or they have a career that has challenges with a few day's vacations or not. I assert that a job that has fewer challenges and has more vacation days has merits for employees. In what follows, the most clear-cut reasons will be discussed.
The first argumentative factor to take into account is that a career with more vacation days make a chance for people to spend adequate time for themselves and their families. To elaborate on this point, I should say that most employee's families always complain that they do not consume adequate time with their children or family members. In this situation, when staffs have a lot of holidays, they would spend it for families such as going to a trip or camping, supervising children's school works, helping to homework besides their wife. Furthermore, recent studies show that most employees struggle with arduous diseases like blood pressure or heart attack because they have insufficient mobility at the workplace, so they become obese. Hence, since they have enough time, they would go to gyms, and they can not only do improve their physical health but also improve mental health.
Another equally significant point is that by having sufficient free time people can improve their financial situation. To shed more light on this matter, in the modern era, most individuals struggle with excessive financial problems, and these problems make several drawback influences on their life such as not being afforded a suitable car or home, and not preparing high quality of food. Hence, when employees have enough vacation days, they would start to run either their own businesses or a second job. Consider a chemical engineer who works at a well-known company, for instance. In this situation, she works 4 days a week for a company with routine duties. As a result, she can think about how starts a second job in her free time both at work and at home. Finally, he starts a second career as a teacher. So, she would gain extra wage from a second part-time job. Nevertheless, if she works full time at a first job, and have several challenges on it, she would not has adequate time for starting a second job.
Taking all aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I personally believe that a job has no challenges and more free time is more convenient compared to a second option. This approach not only improves family relationships but also improve the financial situation.
- TPO 47 - Integrated Writing Task 78
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- TPO 28 90
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 100, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ies. Owing to its paramount importance, a large number of scientists have always been searching f...
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Line 8, column 901, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...rt-time job. Nevertheless, if she works full time at a first job, and have several challe...
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Line 8, column 976, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...several challenges on it, she would not has adequate time for starting a second job...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, nevertheless, second, so, well, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2329.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98715203426 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71139432488 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52034261242 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0136039 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.904761905 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2380952381 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173003387134 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614807641437 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645753526708 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120603089992 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634223958465 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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