Which one of the following do you think is the best way to get to know a city in a limited amount of time when you first visit it?
-touring historic sites
-going to markets or shops
-eating in restaurant and spending time in cafes
Traveling is the greatest to understand this spectacular world. There are many different types of methods to explore a city, like going to markets or shops or eating in a restaurant. In my opinion, I would choose to tour historic sites.
First of all, I could broaden my vision by touring historic sites because I could never experience these magnificent remains before. My previous experience would be a suitable example. When I was an undergraduate, I often went to many diverse foreign cities, like Berlin, which had extremely affluent historic relics. Because I was a historical enthusiast of World War two, I was greatly excited about this travel. With my friends, we went to the German Congress established in 1894 and experienced a good deal of imperative events, like the German revolution in 1918. When I arrived at this astonishing site, I could immerse myself in this historical atmosphere and discuss many events happening in there, like the rise and fall of the German Empire. In contrast, if I chose to go shipping or eating, I would not be able to understand these highly precious historic sites.
Second, I could make some local friends having the same interest in history, such as the Great Depression in 1929. Take my previous experience as an example. When I was an undergraduate, I once went to Munich and visit its city hall which had several hundreds of history. There, I met lots of Germans living in Bayern state. Because I was a history lover, they would discuss many historical events with me, such as World War two, which affected Germany a lot. Moreover, we also tour Munich to visit many attractions, like BMW headquarter, which was established in 1916. With them, I could understand how the war and the economic depression affected German history. By contrast, if I chose to go shipping or eating, I would not be capable of having the opportunity to know these foreign friends.
To sum up, these are the two reasons why I chose to tour historic sites to know a city. On one hand, we could broaden our vision by experiencing these spectacular relics. On the other hand, we could also know some friends through visiting these magnificent remains.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, second, so, thus, in contrast, such as, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1814.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87634408602 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77484988485 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489247311828 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8098404241 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.380952381 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7142857143 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90476190476 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141215226349 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441686931534 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387738349796 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0989082073764 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0114983723079 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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