Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends?
1. joining a sports team
2. participate in community activities
3. Traveling
Today, friendly relationship is a paramount factor in people's lifestyle which many surveys and articles debate on. Based on their research one of most facet of a companionship is how to making a friend. they mentioned lots of methods to do so like usinig and contributing to several activities such as Traveling, Sport, community, etc.
I believe, participating in community activities could perform more good results than the affirmation activities. I feel this way two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
With the beginning, taking part in community activities provide more time to contact with various people along with eclectic interesting and disintresting ideas. Hence, you are able to evaluate their demeanor and compare them with your traits to find best one to strat friendly relation with. For instance, I worked at a company as a seller equepment long time ago and everyday I visited plenty of people who want to buy something. When I talked to them I found their character and could understand their opinion about financial issues which is really important to me to get a friend.
Furthermore, participating in some community activities allows you to cooperate with a people who have the same as your idea about the things you are going to do. haveing in common about an action can seen as a clue for you to understand the person who wants to be your friend whether is in your attitude or not?. let's consider another example from own my life, I am a person who cannot extract correct cognition from the words of people who might be my friend in the future. In this way, I was so confused to trust a person just by their words. Thus, by applying this approach I could filter people around myself and reach to small society which includes the people who have the same as my idea.
To put it in nutshell, I have provided several methods for finding a friend based on papers and scientific research. In addition, I have suggested participating in community activities instead of others and presented some personal experiences to prove my essay.
- TPO 15 Integrated Writing Task 80
- Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends 1 joining a sports team 2 participate in community activities 3 Traveling 76
- TPO 16 60
- Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends 1 joining a sports team 2 participate in community activities 76
- TPO 17 integrated Toefl Writing 70
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Today, friendly relationship is a paramount fac...
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Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...ompanionship is how to making a friend. they mentioned lots of methods to do so like...
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Line 3, column 246, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'find the best'.
Suggestion: find the best
...or and compare them with your traits to find best one to strat friendly relation with. Fo...
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Line 4, column 202, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[3]
Message: Did you mean 'see' or 'be seen'?
Suggestion: see; be seen
.... haveing in common about an action can seen as a clue for you to understand the per...
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Line 4, column 314, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Lets
...nd whether is in your attitude or not?. lets consider another example from own my li...
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Line 4, column 314, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...nd whether is in your attitude or not?. lets consider another example from own my li...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, if, really, so, thus, for instance, i feel, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85915492958 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77743621961 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571830985915 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.1010497019 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 107.8125 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1875 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5625 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212546701394 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068425779211 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036826253321 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115195857479 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195407031825 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Today, friendly relationship is a paramount fac...
^^
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...ompanionship is how to making a friend. they mentioned lots of methods to do so like...
^^^^
Line 3, column 246, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'find the best'.
Suggestion: find the best
...or and compare them with your traits to find best one to strat friendly relation with. Fo...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 202, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[3]
Message: Did you mean 'see' or 'be seen'?
Suggestion: see; be seen
.... haveing in common about an action can seen as a clue for you to understand the per...
^^^^
Line 4, column 314, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Lets
...nd whether is in your attitude or not?. lets consider another example from own my li...
^^^^
Line 4, column 314, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...nd whether is in your attitude or not?. lets consider another example from own my li...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, if, really, so, thus, for instance, i feel, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85915492958 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77743621961 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571830985915 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.1010497019 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 107.8125 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1875 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5625 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212546701394 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068425779211 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036826253321 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115195857479 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195407031825 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.