young people enjoy life more than the older people
people's entertainment differently according to their age. young people find something very interesting but, the same thing other age groups may not find interesting. In my view, young people enjoy life more than old people as they are new everything they face in their lifetimes and they are full of energy and vigor.
people often entertain most when they have new things in their life. The young people life is full of excitement; they never ever seen various things that they perceive in their lifetime. The study has suggested that people become more excited and curious when they find novelty in their life. this curiosity and excitement influence degree of the enjoyment. For instance, going pub and spending time doing dancing, singing is enjoyed by most of the younger people. However, these things look facinating for them but it may not attract older people at all as it is not anymore new to them. even if they enjoy it, the intensity of happiness rarely comparable to the youth who have done similar things. even myself, when I am seventeen years old enjoyed most of the parties without internal restraint but, the situation has changed a lot now; I enjoy the party but it does not keep happy that way I use to feel when I am seventeen. Therefore, the environment or things will be the same but on increasing age and maturity, only people been changed and lost the charm they once have.
younger people mostly in the vital stage of their life when they are robust, energetic and full of vigor. For enjoyment, people need energy, passion and most of all being healthy. In contrast to young, older ones most with physically unfit and suffered from the disease. For happiness and enjoyment, health plays essential factors. In old age, people may not able to enjoy the moment; they constantly have to suffer the pain, restriction on what they eat. furthermore, life will become miserable. even when their youth time enjoys the most: the privilege to eat whatever they want and the mostly good health. The young people have one important asset that makes them enjoy more life than the older one.
In conclusion, older people may enjoy their life but not as younger people. even older people enjoy it when they reminisce the activities when they were young.
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- TOEFL T P O 4 - Integrated Writing Task 3
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, in contrast to, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83547557841 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36909231217 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511568123393 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.4368676358 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6818181818 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68181818182 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.44816486869 0.236089414692 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155400548155 0.076458572812 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127505273282 0.0737576698707 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.366108435214 0.150856017488 243% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544166143275 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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