Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Throughout history, in all civilized societies, young people’ role in society engendered copious controversies among people. Some people may hold the view that juvenile help communities to progress. However, some other may take on opposite view point and believe that they do not care enough about their communities to spend their time to help it. As far as I am concerned, young people do not give adequate time to help their society. In the following paragraph, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first aspect to point out is that technology advanced. We should take into account changes occur in people’ lifestyle because of development in technology. To illustrate, it leads to rise of computer games which many people enjoy them and spend their time on playing them. These game simulate a very amazing situation for player and because this condition many people especially young people become addicted to them. Hence, people prefer to spend their free time on these game. For example, a person that are addicted to this game they always think about these game. Therefore, they do not have any time left to help their communities.
A further more subtle point is that juvenile are very busy and have a hectic life. To demonstrate, they have classes in school all the time and after finishing school, they must attain in high school and university. Also, they always think about their future. Nowadays, young people try really hard to enhance their knowledge because there are many competition for getting a job in the future. So, they spend all their time to study and participate in classes and work shop to gain more knowledge and become ready for their future life. For instance, a person who is a college student, the only things he think is his lesson and future. Hence, it is obvious to see that juvenile do not spend their time to help their society get better.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned argument, due to advancement of technology and business, young people do not spend sufficient time on helping their society. Consequently, it is highly recommended that we create a program for university and school to force young people to help their communities.
- Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are 78
- Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. 76
- In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. 71
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign country. 70
- In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. 65
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 344, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun competition seems to be countable; consider using: 'many competitions'.
Suggestion: many competitions
...hance their knowledge because there are many competition for getting a job in the future. So, th...
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Line 3, column 605, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...s a college student, the only things he think is his lesson and future. Hence, it is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9811827957 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65001276183 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497311827957 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3830352524 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2380952381 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7142857143 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.445688041652 0.236089414692 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138518231074 0.076458572812 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127566323825 0.0737576698707 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.306883455302 0.150856017488 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0845489169029 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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