Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole
As we all know, young people are less attracted by society's rules and disciplines due to the fact that society has more limitations on their act and decision. Personally speaking, I agree with this statement and believe that this gap maybe has a negative impact on society's future. In the following, I will point some out standing reasons which support my idea.
First, it's on every single decision but when people get dissatisfied with doing their rules as influence citizens, they deposit and are unwilling to join on social events. For example, when employees are dissatisfied with their work income, or some circumstances that cause employees and employers to get to fight together and behave in unfriendly ways, they prefer to not act actively in their responsibilities and after several times they leave out their job. I can remember the duration that the sub-ground driver acted against their low income and for a week they didn't attend to their job. It makes many problems for the city and other people. Thus, that made bad consequences for city duties.
The second point that supports my idea is, although, sometimes government proves some rules foe decrease the prices or accessible for some arbitrary it had a negative impact on people's lives. we all know that prices rose dramatically and it makes it hard for major of people to effort their lives, So such rules that have a positive correlation between people's income and prices must be identified and decided whether should change or not if the change should take some strategies that help people to this situation.
To the short long story, I agree with this statement that Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole and also I believe that government must create a huge opportunity to help young people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1532.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94193548387 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61641341281 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561290322581 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.6207445446 48.9658058833 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.272727273 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1818181818 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09090909091 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247495945899 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0875788684534 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154375291997 0.0737576698707 209% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195863774293 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.206156644706 0.0645574589148 319% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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