Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, with respect to the expansion of the technology field and devices, it is easier than old to communicate with people all around the world. As we all know, the ability to connect and make a good conversation with people is the first step in our lives. It has a mass impact on all sides of our lives and makes flexibility in our characters. Few multitudes opine that studying hard in school is more important than soft ability for success in a future job, but others ponder and believe it is not. I think soft skills like communication with coworkers, team working, and having a good understanding of circumstances are much important in studying hard at school for several reasons. In the following, I will pinpoint some outstanding reasons which support my idea.
The first aspect to point out is that schools have important roles in training and developing such abilities in children. Each student spends half of their life in school so it is more important that schools and teachers be aware and consider that students have propulsion engines for learning fast. Thus it is on schools to have a strong plan for boosting the soft skills of the students.
Second, I'd have my doubts about hard studying being a guarantee of getting success in my future career life. HArd studying, Although, has a positive impact on final grades and GPA and increases the chance of getting a promotion with a high salary but if some skills do not work properly at work, it increases the chance of sooner retirement.For example, my previous lead team is a young man that is very smart and intelligent but he could not connect and manage the team properly. After several meetings and conflicts between the team members and him, the company decided to get out him off the firm.
To the sort long story, I think some soft abilities like relating to people are more important than other factors in the success of a future career.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: to fast
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, thus, for example, i think, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73952095808 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62479243001 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538922155689 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.3740284909 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.769230769 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6923076923 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46153846154 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295689565996 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103035142138 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0824256597798 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177660910621 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.074049690356 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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