Your city is trying to construct a new building in order to attract more tourists. Which do you think would be the best tourist attraction?
A historical museum
A shopping mall
An indoor amusement park
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Make sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
By and large, It is established beyond doubt that with the advancement in society, the city's infrastructure is changing. In this regard, constructing new places for tourism is of paramount importance. There are different schools of thought among authorities on whether to build a historical museum, a shopping mall or an amusement park. As for this writer's opinion, I agree with the notion of building a shopping mall. It will attract the youngsters for shopping and families for relaxation. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoint. The first compelling reason corroborating my stance is that building a shopping mall will attract young adults for shopping. Obviously, the shopping mall will have many departmental stores and branded shops. People will attract to shopping and spent their money buying gifts and other necessities of their lives. This will bring revenue to the mall, which can be used to expand the mall with even more variety of shops. By the way of illustration, Five years ago when Devonshire Mall was built in my town, it was a small mall with few outlets. As it is a fact that people especially young adults love to shop and hang out with their friends. My son started himself felt attracted to the mall because he could spend a variety of his time in the malls where there are lots of bright shops and fun. With the passage of time, as more people started to come, the mall size got bigger, now it is the main mall of my town. It's all because it's a huge attraction to young visitors. The second rationale behind my opinion is rooted in the fact that shopping malls will provide entertainment and relaxation to families, therefore they will pay more visits to the malls. Not only youngsters but also there is a lot of attraction for every walk of people. For instance, many shopping malls have certain indoor rides, therefore even children want to visit the mall and hence families prefer to go to the mall for entertainment where they can spend their time with relaxation. My own example is a compelling case. Now My two sons always insist on me going to the mall because they want to go on the rides. I prefer that too because I can easily leave them on rides and do my shopping. At the end of the day, my children are happy and entertained by the rides in the mall, and I felt relaxed after doing my shopping. By perusing the above paragraphs, I ardently assert that building a shopping mall will be a great tourist attraction. As not only youngsters will go there to shop but also families will go to relax too.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
... mall or an amusement park. As for this writers opinion, I agree with the notion of bui...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...er, now it is the main mall of my town. Its all because its a huge attraction to yo...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, as for, for instance, by and large, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2128.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64628820961 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6344620234 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484716157205 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9329016814 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6666666667 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0833333333 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08333333333 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.53405017921 22% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212459498723 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680900573555 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479431273923 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212459498723 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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