Your friend has the opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice, and why?
A major that would allow him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner (so that he would begin to work full-time quickly). Or
A major that requires many years of study that would provide him with more employment opportunities and offers in the future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Be sure to use your own words. Do not memorize some certain examples.
In today's competitive world, there is no denying the fact that education plays a pivotal roll in so many aspects throughout one's lifetime. In this regard, there are number of people who trying to make a convenient life by obtaining a apropriate job. As far as I am concerned, the advantages of getting the degree sooner and getting a full time jobs sunbstantially outweigh those of the other one because of quite a few reasons, two monumental of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
The first exquisite reasons coming to mind is that terminating the education soon and obtaining the degree for hiring in a full time job would have a positive effect on the person's mind. To be more specific, a friend of mine whom I have known for 5 years has a rich life without any disapointed matters. He and me started our M.Sc. educations in two years ago and he ended this studies period in one year and after that find a welthy job, got married, and made a families. In contrast, I tried to reach a part time job and actually I did not end my education yet and consequently, there is a terrible presure on me.
Another Salient reason which deserves some word here is studing in a long period will have much costs in as much as some reasons, like the cost of study, trasnportation, etc. This is worthy to mention that the catched money from the part time job may not be enough to answering the costs of studying. To illustrate this concept, similar to second paragraph of this essay, my friend are gaining more money than I am obtaining and also he can savea more than me. In addition, personally, I heard from the plenty of people who said me try to make a full time job if you are intrested to make more money.
To sum up, even though there are many people who subscribe to view that the student must work and study simultaneously, but the above reasons are explaining that this idea would not be appropriate for the student's future. Apart from what I mentioned as reasons, there are many other ones that aprove my opinion.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 233, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... to make a convenient life by obtaining a apropriate job. As far as I am concerne...
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Line 1, column 335, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...getting the degree sooner and getting a full time jobs sunbstantially outweigh those of t...
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Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...nd obtaining the degree for hiring in a full time job would have a positive effect on the...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 329, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Sc
...ointed matters. He and me started our M.Sc. educations in two years ago and he end...
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Line 3, column 462, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a family' or simply 'families'?
Suggestion: a family; families
...ind a welthy job, got married, and made a families. In contrast, I tried to reach a part t...
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Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...milies. In contrast, I tried to reach a part time job and actually I did not end my educa...
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Line 5, column 92, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...e is studing in a long period will have much costs in as much as some reasons, like ...
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Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...mention that the catched money from the part time job may not be enough to answering the ...
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Line 5, column 520, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nally, I heard from the plenty of people who said me try to make a full time job ...
^^
Line 5, column 526, Rule ID: SAY_TELL[2]
Message: 'Say' cannot be followed by a direct personal object. Did you mean 'told'?
Suggestion: told
... I heard from the plenty of people who said me try to make a full time job if you a...
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Line 5, column 548, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...ty of people who said me try to make a full time job if you are intrested to make more m...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, if, may, second, so, apart from, in addition, in contrast, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1658.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53005464481 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61536927972 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549180327869 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.4395962733 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.538461538 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1538461538 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119447741532 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413837276287 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464628710276 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0773196955538 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383196833869 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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