Your local government has just recently received a large donation from an anonymous donor to improve
the community. Almost everyone agrees that the money should be invested in building a new public
facility. Which of the following do you think your local government should build?
- Build a public library
- Build a public park
- Build a public pool
No one can deny that there are both advantages and disadvantages of any public facility we choose to build. If I had to choose one, I would choose public library. I firmly believe that public library would be most valuable to the people compared to other facilities for 2 reasons, and I will demostrate them in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, the absence of library in my locality has forced people to purchase ebooks and view them on large tabs, as a result their eyes are getting damaged due to the constant strain on their eyes. Childrens have to travel to the outskirts of the city to get their textbooks which is quite cumbersome task and even then there isn’t gurantee that will get all the required books. My opinion on this is profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. My nephew, who is currently in 6th grade was looking for a physics textbook for past few days but cannot find anywhere, finally he purchased the ebook version of it. If there had been library in my area, he would have easily access to that book.
Secondly, many phd students in my locality are working on several research papers which require them to colloraborate on multiple occasions. Since there is no public library in my area they have to travel to the university library everyday so that their thesis gets completed. Sometimes it can become quite stressfull to travel everyday Also addition of library can provide oppurtunities for elderly to read books without travelling too far. For instance, my grandfather wish to read a book on Evolution of humuns but for that he has to travel outside the city which he can’t.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that public library should be build. This is because it make books more accessible for childrens and elderly people, and will help phd students to easily work together on a research without travelling too far.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 91, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...ary should be build. This is because it make books more accessible for childrens and...
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Line 7, column 206, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...phd students to easily work together on a research without travelling too far.
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, as for, as to, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1554.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84112149533 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64200169206 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551401869159 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5262315056 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9285714286 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.21428571429 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0769560419724 0.236089414692 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.034227111292 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391563537735 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0551099155842 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213212680669 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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