The reading discusses altruism as a valuable behavior among animals and humans which is to act for the benefit of others rather than yours. It uses some examples of altruism among homo sapiens and another type of mammal called meerkat which is believed to have a great sense of unselfish manners. The lecturer refers to some new information about this animal and refutes the belief of altruism among them.
As we understand from the passage, during the hunting for food, a member of meerkats would act as a guardian and stays alert for any predator that may endanger the group by screaming. It is described as a altruistic act due to the high level of getting hunted by a predator and also losing the chance to eat. As we we hear from the lecturer, the new facts are uncovered by scientists that shows the opposite. It is revealed that the meerkats would not stay as guards before they start to eat and the guarded has a better chance to escape because it has been alerted faster than others and also the alarm cry would act as a defensive act that would keep the predator away from it.
The lecturer also believes that the behavior of humans is not unselfish either. The humans who would share food or donate a body organ, would do these acts because they like to be awarded a sense of self-worth from the society.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 81
- Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you 76
- Movies and TV have more negative effects than positive effects on the way of young behave. 80
- Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them 81
- consequences of reading less literature. 61
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 204, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... group by screaming. It is described as a altruistic act due to the high level of...
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Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: we
...r and also losing the chance to eat. As we we hear from the lecturer, the new facts a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, may, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1084.0 1373.03311258 79% => OK
No of words: 238.0 270.72406181 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55462184874 5.08290768461 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32396625431 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542016806723 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 341.1 419.366225166 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.2415877549 49.2860985944 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.444444444 110.228320801 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4444444444 21.698381199 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.44444444444 7.06452816374 20% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211300559529 0.272083759551 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887200746577 0.0996497079465 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800933783629 0.0662205650399 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135367833264 0.162205337803 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112962728831 0.0443174109184 255% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.3589403974 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 12.2367328918 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 63.6247240618 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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