Asteroids are large space objects made of rock and ice. There are hundreds of thousands of asteroids in our solar system. Though we often hear ideas about establishing colonies of humans to live and work on our Moon or our neighboring planet, Mars, some think that sending people to an asteroid would actually be the best colonization option for a number of reasons.
The passage proposed three benefits for immigrating to asteroids.
First, compared with planet, they have lower gravity because of their small volume,making the landing safer than landing on the moon or mars. Moreover, the spacecraft is more feasible to carry more capital to the colony. Nevertheless, the professor indicates some risks. First, low atmosphere of gravity will lead to bone density loss, easily cause health issues.
Secondly, some asteroids are ample in valuable elements and precious metals, which is substantially rare on Earth. However, reaching asteroids will spend a great deal of money, therefore consume the profit of collecting rare metals. Furthermore, because the quantity of rare metals increase, it will be more priceless for consumers.
Last but not least, asteroids are a perfect option for colonization since it will be easy to achieve . By contrast, the professor contends that asteroids’ orbits are irregular , it might come close to the earth in a uncertain period of time, but it would move away later, which makes it a big challenge for astronaut to return from the asteroid.
All in all , all proposals mentioned in the passage have a few issues remained to be resolved and discussed further.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , making
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ization since it will be easy to achieve . By contrast, the professor contends tha...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...nds that asteroids’ orbits are irregular , it might come close to the earth in a u...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...r , it might come close to the earth in a uncertain period of time, but it would ...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... return from the asteroid. All in all , all proposals mentioned in the passage ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 12.0772626932 25% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 22.412803532 36% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1047.0 1373.03311258 76% => OK
No of words: 196.0 270.72406181 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34183673469 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82859674958 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.678571428571 0.540411800872 126% => OK
syllable_count: 325.8 419.366225166 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.8899928918 49.2860985944 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1818181818 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8181818182 21.698381199 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09090909091 7.06452816374 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0792799913374 0.272083759551 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0278486038392 0.0996497079465 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0274441498326 0.0662205650399 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0340868524924 0.162205337803 21% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309291765987 0.0443174109184 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 53.8541721854 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.88 8.42419426049 117% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 63.6247240618 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.