Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
However some people believe that the celebrities have influence in all the people in every age and nation, but in my opinion this statement in fundamentally correct; celebrities opinion are more important to younger then the elder ones; which is clear to all of us. Therefore, I totally agree with the statement and I want to reinforce my opinion from the following aspects.
The chief reason why I generally agree with the statement is that most of the young people admire them in some cases love and accepts them blindly. Therefore, they accept their opinion unless to challenge it. Where is some cases are misused by some companies to advertise and sell their products because they know that the youngers accept the celebrities opinion and most of the time target them. like what we see every they in the TV they uses most of the famous athletes that uses a certain sort of the shampoo which in turn helps to the celebrities fame.
The latter reason why I generally agree with the statement is that youngers most of the time are serious to their life style, love to know how they think and how they act because they think by doing things in a way the celebrities done they can access to their fame. For example, I love to play piano and I have been pay in for 16 years by the way when I was in my sixteens I lessened a lot to the famous pianist plays and concerts in some cases I loved to imitate them to play like them. In on site I read that Maksim , one of the pianist that I love him, loves to sit a little far from the piano and I done it. stupidly I thought by imitating him, I would obtained to the fame that he have.
The last but not the least, most of us have some thing common with the celebrities that we follow and love them. like in the kind of the instrument that we play and so on. Therefore, we could think in the same way and I think that is why have the most influence to the youngers.
In sum, younger try to learn and because most of us love a glorious lifestyle, we follow the most of the famous one that we ever know and loves to imitate them and think in the way they are thinking. Therefore, I totally agree with the statement based on the reasons I mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...lebrities that we follow and love them. like in the kind of the instrument that we p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, therefore, for example, i think, kind of, sort of, by the way, in my opinion, in some cases, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 7.30242825607 233% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 22.412803532 299% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 30.3222958057 208% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1373.03311258 131% => OK
No of words: 415.0 270.72406181 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.32048192771 5.08290768461 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.04702891845 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30769105569 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4 0.540411800872 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 419.366225166 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.802661291 49.2860985944 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.533333333 110.228320801 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6666666667 21.698381199 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.06666666667 7.06452816374 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 4.33554083885 300% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205107373667 0.272083759551 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770146927143 0.0996497079465 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631939506538 0.0662205650399 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13170983956 0.162205337803 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659907876638 0.0443174109184 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.07 12.2367328918 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.42419426049 84% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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