Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air millions of birds are harmed every year when they try to fly through glass windows T | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when they try to fly through glass windows. There are, however, several solutions that responsible businesses can use to prevent injuries to birds.

One-Way Glass

One solution is to replace the regular, clear glass with one-way glass that is transparent in only one direction. The occupants of the building can see out, but birds and others cannot see in. If birds cannot see through a window, they will understand that the glass forms a solid barrier and will not try to fly through it.

Colorful Designs

A second solution is to paint colorful lines or other designs on regular window glass. For example, a window could have a design of thin stripes painted over the glass. People would still be able to see through the openings in the design where there is no paint, while birds would see the stripes and thus avoid trying to fly through the glass. Architects can be encouraged to include colorful painted patterns on glass as part of the general design of buildings.

Magnetic Field

The third solution is to create an artificial magnetic field to guide birds away from buildings. Humans use an instrument called a magnetic compass to determine directions—either north, south, east, or west. Bird research has shown that birds have a natural ability to sense Earth's magnetic fields; this ability works just like a compass, and it helps birds navigate in the right direction when they fly. A building in a bird flight path can be equipped with powerful electromagnets that emit magnetic signals that steer birds in a direction away from the building.

The author cites three reasons to support the view point that three solutions can be used to prevent birds from getting injured. Nevertheless, the lecturer argues that these three solutions are not effective.

Firstly, the author argues that replacing regular class with one-way glass is useful as birds can not see through a window, making them understand that there is a solid barrier and will nor fly through it. However, the lecturer offers an opposite stand that birds will still fly into it. To be more specific, one-way class reflects real things in the sky like a mirror, making birds aware of that it is the real sky and fly into it.

Secondly, the author contents that painting colorful lines or other designs on regular window glass can prevent birds from getting injured and people inside still can see through the openings where there is no paint. On the contrary, the speaker refutes this solution that it will make people inside feel too dark. In order to prohibit birds from flying through the window, the empty space has to be made very small unless birds will regard it as holes and fly through it. In this way, people inside will feel too dark and can not see outside.

Thirdly, the author says that using artificial magnetic field will lead birds away from buildings, given the fact that birds rely on sensing magnetic field to navigate in the right direction. Nonetheless, this view is also counteracted by the lecturer that it does not work well. Although birds rely on magnetic field to navigate, this ability is only used in long distance. When birds fly in short distance, they depend more on eyes or the bright of light, making the usage of artificial magnetic field ineffective. Eventually, birds will still fly through the window.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, well, as to, in short, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1466.0 1373.03311258 107% => OK
No of words: 302.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85430463576 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2695915947 2.5805825403 88% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503311258278 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 431.1 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9042719028 49.2860985944 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.714285714 110.228320801 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 21.698381199 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3571428571 7.06452816374 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190970303463 0.272083759551 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723584016347 0.0996497079465 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604602684435 0.0662205650399 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109512033818 0.162205337803 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477587047554 0.0443174109184 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 53.8541721854 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, well, as to, in short, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments